Reviews For Yola's girl
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Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/10/19 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love your stories, Q, I'm always there for you.

Reviewer: Portia Bennett Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/08/19 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 1

You know you are always welcome to call on me. I thought it was a delightful story. I didn't see that many problems, but I am used to your writing.

Reviewer: QModo Signed Report
Date: 11/08/19 05:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

An offer of help could sound very nice, but it's your choice.

Then as you remarked English is bad. Both Yola and the girl aren't Americans. Beside English there are some pure American things a middle school student has to know.

Reviewer: Taxouck Signed Report
Date: 11/08/19 10:30 am Title: Chapter 1

The english needs a lot of work. It causes the writing to feel extremely stilted and fake. In terms of the story itself, a few things stuck out like sore thumbs. The girl used to be a doctor, yet she’s worried she’d be sent back to kindergarten and she needs to study for tests blatantly below her level? Also, Yola lost any and all sympathy from me when she threatened violence on her kid simply for not liking the clothes she’d prepared for her. That’s extremely disgustingly abusive behavior. That woman should not be a mom.

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