Date: 10/13/19 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Now I usually skip Realistic Gender Change stories, but for some reason I read this one, and I'm glad I did! Oh my, you have shared a BEAUTIFUL work of art! (grin)
I had to suspend my disbelief at the end only a little, for the sake of the story, that these two wouldn't have already stumbled across their shared past, but it was worth it, I got choked up! Also some nice subplots along the way.
Date: 10/13/19 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was another lovely story and made me scream out in satisfaction at the reveal bit.
But, and this is something you did in your previous stories... you're messing up the grammar for transgender. It's an adjective already, you don't need to add -ed at the end to make it one. "A transgender woman." "A trans woman." "I am transgender."
Just, coming across the line always takes me out of the story, but it's a really simple ctrl-f search and replace fix to do and to remember.
Still, this was a wonderful tale. And the teen girl experience is a mood. I mean, sure, 19 months on HRT is a serious amount of time, but that effectively makes me 14 or 15 in development.
Author's Response: Thank you! Unfortunately, as a physics and math major way back in college, I barely squeaked by my one required English composition class. My mother used to proof read for me and correct grammar and tenses. Still searching for a text tool capable of taking over that task.