Reviews For Canvas
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Reviewer: I_Think Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/20/19 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1

Solid setup with good imagery! I don't think your writing is terrible. I *am* curious about your overall plotting decisions though; while the immersive-VR-game frame story is mildly interesting, I find that it's not yet super integrated into the story and I'm more curious about what our protagonist has on their in-world hands.

Reviewer: ZZChromosome Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/15/19 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 2

Phenomenal start. This is really well-written. I'm very much looking forward to what sort of hi-jinks a sexy unicorn-girl deity gets up to.

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/15/19 05:10 pm Title: Chapter 1

Interesting. I'd like to see more.

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