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Reviewer: AshleyAllison Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/05/19 06:12 pm Title: The Woman You Were Meant To Be

Your piece had so many elements I relish. Love this, and can't wait to read your other writings :)

Author's Response: Canít wait to hear what you have to say about them! -Baq

Reviewer: Artemesia Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/05/19 05:36 pm Title: The Woman You Were Meant To Be

Quick and fun. I love your stuff. Please keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Let me know what you think of my other pieces! -Baq

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/04/19 04:51 am Title: The Woman You Were Meant To Be

Yes! An excellent transformation. Very detailed. Easy to picture the woman. I wish I could squeeze those breasts!

As for the second person narration, it works just fine in a single person story. In a long multiperson conversation it gets a little tedious. Your writing is just fine.

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