Date: 12/14/19 06:28 pm Title: Part 1
This story is very well written and has a lot of depth to it but I didn't enjoy it, honestly it leaves a bad taste in my mouth.
If Simon were to straight up rape, mutilate then murder his friend I'd feel less violated as Hannah/Hank. Hannah had her/his? entire being re-written to become someone's wet dream. The most disgusting thing is she ended up liking it because she has been conditioned to like it, just as she is conditioned to "fall in love" with Simon.
Being the pervert I am I've read a lot of fucked up things but this story somehow takes the cake. There are other identity lost stories out there but none hit me this hard because this one is so in depth and well executed.
This story does raise an interesting moral question, if you can just rewrite someone's mind so they can have a better life, should you do it? My own answer is HELL NO
Author's Response: That's why I typically list my stories as "dark fantasy". I broach darker aspects of the human soul. Though I have seen much darker stories out there, I have lines that I do not cross.
Date: 10/09/19 06:47 pm Title: Part 6 (Final)
Great story, thanks! I thought it had nowhere to go after he agreed to the change but it went so much deeper!
Author's Response: Transformations are always fun. But I think the true fun of the story is the immediate aftermath. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: 10/08/19 03:11 pm Title: Part 6 (Final)
Well, I have to say I am impressed. You really dug yourself a hole with the forced transformation, a lie to cover it up, and certain identity death. But Simon came through, as much as he could, by fessing up to Hannah, then by pulling out before the final transformation.
Your description of the mental and emotional changes was incredible and really elevated this story.
I'm glad you added the epilogue, but you never tied up a serious loose end - did Simon's dad ever find out about the booze?
Thanks for writing this sensitive tale and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
Author's Response: Haha, yeah the booze... This was a fun story to write. And I had to try and work through those challenges for Simon. The story really needed to focus on his conflict. Thank you for all your feedback.
Date: 10/07/19 12:12 am Title: Part 5
So, round two is in the bank, so to speak.
I really was not expecting the mind meld and the way Simon was able to affect her mind and soul like that. You have really taken this story to another level, and your writing is incredible. This could have been just another mechanical TG story but you have made it so much more. Thank you.
BTW, it all seems to be too good to be true for Simon, so I am expecting something really bad to happen. I'm still hoping for a happy ending, though.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! Yeah I attempted to give a little more focus to the "identity death" aspect of these stories, which is usually more in the background. I am glad you are enjoying the story and hope you like the ending.
Date: 10/06/19 09:36 pm Title: Part 4
That was quite the intermission. I like the speed and direction of Hannah's changes. If she is going to remain a girl I'd like to see her and Hank be a couple.
This story is reminding me of the plot from Passengers, where he woke her up knowing she would die on the ship before reaching their destination. Similar moral dilemma, but they made the best of it.
I hope Simon comes clean, and that Hannah manages to forgive him. Though I'd understand if she never does.
Great job with the writing.
Author's Response: Thank you. I have not read/seen Passengers, sounds like an interesting tale.
Date: 10/06/19 09:14 pm Title: Part 5
This is why you don't become friends with incels and 4channers. Simon may not fully be an incel, but he sure damn treats girls like he is one. Willing to completely rewrite his best friends personality to get his "dream girll." I don't know who this lady is, but does she like seeing gross disgusting men like Simon treating women as his property? Maybe she longs for the 1800s again
Author's Response: Yeah I don't think he would be considered an incel. And he was on reddit not 4chan. Definitely has issues since he was willing to go through with it. This character's biggest problem was he wasn't willing to settle for less than perfection, and as we all know there is no "perfect" anything in real life. The magic gave him a chance to taste that perfection, and the question is posed at "what cost".
Date: 10/06/19 03:18 am Title: Part 3
For a guy who has only had sex one time, Simon seems to know exactly how to seduce a woman.
Great descriptions of everything going on, very erotic. Thank you.
Author's Response: Yeah that is probably is a bit unrealistic. Thanks for the feedback.
Date: 10/05/19 10:37 pm Title: Part 1
Great start to a unique form of transformation. What a moral dilemma. Looks like Simon used Little Simon to resolve it. What would I have done? Hmmmm.
Author's Response: Idealized girl or best friend. It is a tough choice, though the act of removing his friend is immoral.
Date: 10/05/19 09:38 pm Title: Part 4
This is really quite enjoyable. Hopefully things will work out for the lovers. Of course, she will have to know everything. Eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Yep, she would need to know all! I'm glad you are enjoying it.