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Reviewer: Dundee15 Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 10/04/19 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 2

Not terrible, but you change perspective mid-chapter. Going from 'I' to 'You' and back to describe the same character's actions. You have some great ideas that could use a little fleshing out, but not bad for a first try.

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TG Storytime uses the eFiction engine and Vanilla discussions. Design by J6P.