Reviews For Witches and Tech
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Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/15/19 07:05 am Title: Chapter 3

Wow, this is starting to get deep.

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/13/19 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 2

Bit of a confusing start, but I'm sure things will settle down as we get further into the story. Curious to see what the magic will do.

Reviewer: Lilchelly Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/13/19 04:29 am Title: Chapter 2

Julia is such a spoiled brat. Lisa literally told her she wanted to transition and she wouldn't let her. Fudge off you conceited woman. Why not actually listen to the person you're dating instead of being such a URGH

Author's Response: I hope to change your mind in a few chapters.... any more than that would be spoilers... I got sooo much work to do on character building next time. Thank you for the review.

Reviewer: Limbos Mistress Signed Report
Date: 11/12/19 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 2

Very intriguing. Can't wait to see what happens next!

LM

Author's Response: Yeah ... its complicated, John's going to have trouble getting his toasted cheese sandwich! Oh the other stuff.. yes... Thank you Mistress

Reviewer: rudoliastaehel Signed Report
Date: 11/12/19 06:24 am Title: Chapter 1

20 years late I guess but yeah maybe its time to fix your marriage lol.
Interesting story. Wife is in a crappy situation since she doesnt love him while hubby seems to huh, get his mind wiped once in a while. I guess its a crappy situation for everyone involved.
Though I didnt understand if in the end he did cheat on her or not in that VR, particularly since he does apparently love her a lot. Also why does she care? Hope you profundize on that!

Author's Response: Profundizing a lot on this story. My biggest head scratcher is... does what happens in VR stay in VR? I mean really? It does if both sides in a relationship agree... but how many do? Its not so easy. However rl is more complicated. Not everyone can map feelings to someone on a screen, whilst others can full on empathise. Add that deception can be so easy (faked body language, scripted "chat" styles etc.) Its worse for those that empathise easily or want to empathise. Now I need to have a an awkward conversation with a girl about a Morph... Thank you.

Reviewer: helzblack Signed Report
Date: 09/24/19 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 1

So they morphed and use his magic and erase his mind whenver they please? You musn't let them get away with it. I hate stories where mind wipers get scot free. Really hoping your story continues

Author's Response: Yes it will be continued. I was tired and had to correct so many little things it made me sad at the time. This has turned out like a fruit concentrate, way to much in too little space. Anyway, more to come. Thank you for the comment.

Reviewer: junyour Signed Report
Date: 09/23/19 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

I think this story has potential, but I will withhold my rating until much later in the presentation. Please continue.

Author's Response: Yes more to come, I have written technical stuff all my life and they generate very little in the way emotion (except maybe boredom or relief when finished) but this was built in 2 hours after 2 years sitting as an idea. I was left fizzing with excitement after the first draft. Next time i will sleep on it and review it in the morning instead of just before bed. Thank you for the comment :-)

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