Date: 04/04/20 09:29 pm Title: Chapter 50: An Open Quest
Heck with the story (well, no, I'm also dropping everything to read any one of your new chapters in any story), now more worried about your health. Do you suppose you have... it? Take care of yourself, we care about you! (Yeah even if you're half a world away from most of us, and we've never met other than digitally.) Please use some patreon dollars to buy immune boosters, find something that works for you.
Date: 03/05/20 06:38 am Title: Chapter 36: The Taylor Interlude Part 3
Chiri you adorable little sadist....gives no shits about the brutalized corpses of schmucks scattered around her.
Hopefully this plant does something really cool. Potentially something like that Whispering Song poison or whatever was. Because that was certainly effective.
Date: 03/04/20 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 31: Nervous Ball of Quivering
So a rebellion has started, wonder how long until things go up in flames because someone decided to take things to far. Hopefully that doesn't happen, though i don't want to get my cynical hopes up.
When i read the first paragraph describing April/Chiri i was like "thats totally Chiri isn't it?" Which is nice, because i do enjoy her character a lot. On a less pleasant note, looks like i right to be concerned over her mental well-being....would of preferred if i wasn't right about that but at least she'll get some actual love and support and stuff now.
Date: 03/04/20 06:50 am Title: Chapter 27: The Paper Thing
Oh my, that wasn't how i was expecting the reveal to go at all.
Angsty cliffhanger aside, firing yourself out of a magical cannon so you can slam into a piece of flying artillery with the force of a very angry lightning bolt has to be one of the most badass things i've ever heard of.
Also, having a race of irsh anime fox people that spit at the concept of safety standards and like making walking settlements with assault batteries is some next level worldbuilding type stuff. So to props to you for that as well.
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I love the artifisuki so much! My girlfriend had to suffer through me speaking in a terrible irish accent all through writing them.
Date: 03/04/20 05:47 am Title: Chapter 26: What Vell Would Do
Huh, so that answers my questions about her appearance. A glowing electrically charged badass she certainly seems to be. Also, i'm with May on this. This sort of event seems pretty unreasonable to throw at people who are new to the game but eh, thats....virtual life i guess?
Also, i see the confirmation confirming what I expected basically since dawn was introduced as a character. Thats going to be interesting.
Date: 03/04/20 04:00 am Title: Chapter 25: The Kid and Her Glasses
So MaTRON is the game's mental wellness AI but gained sentience. Personally i feel like that would make her better at her job but i'm not an evil corporate overlord so what do i know. That and she seems way too adorable to kill.
I also wonder how the merging affected Tami's character, cause sure she is more tanned and has fancy lightning hair but what i'm wondering is if she still has shape shifting powers or not. Granted such questions will probably be answered in the coming chapters, but i just like typing stuff like this out.
Oh, and a race reveal on what Rora is. I've been wondering what she was for some time now. Being a fire elemental sounds cool
Date: 03/04/20 01:18 am Title: Chapter 23: Rusti
You know, from a technical standpoint slamming into someone so hard that you turn them into bloody mist would be less painful then a lot of other methods, so by that logic Tami has a point it is more 'humane'
Its also nice that Tami and Aurora have officially gotten together and stopped dance-flirting/pining around each other. They are super adorable together.
Also also, i can totally see Chiri "being busy testing poisons" cause that would be something she would do. I am somewhat concerning for her mental well-being though.
Date: 03/03/20 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 17: MaTRON
Some serious shenanigans are definitely afoot. Chiri is also apparently an adorable little murderer that carries around large amounts of high explosives. Concerning, but something i can get behind because explosions are great.
Date: 03/03/20 04:34 am Title: Chapter 11: I am Tami
Well, that was certainly eerie, and very descriptive. Having a giant undead angel guard thing trying to brain you with two magical flails would certainly put a damper on things. Also...if loot is rolled per-character, i wonder if you could get that thing's flails by using that weapon type. They certainly seemed like very effective weapons.
Date: 03/02/20 11:19 pm Title: Chapter 10: Little Demon
Hopefully Xethu and Grerum don't end up made at them for getting lost. Twould be unfair given the misty shenanigans that happened/happen. Florence would be mad either way, but his opinion doesn't really matter.
Date: 01/22/20 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
Loving Ryana, so cute! And we're super curious to find out what's Civette's deal. After this chapter, we're suddenly wondering if she might be plural... the sudden mood shifts & odd reactions remind us of switching.
Date: 01/22/20 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
This is great. I don't have the words honestly.
Civette is really curious and I can but really don't want to wait to know what is going on behind her somewhat grumpy face.
Having a dragon is cool. I don't have anything particular to comment about it, except that you have made it sound enjoyably cat-like.
I hope your survival is looking to continue, because if nothing else, the world would be lessened for not having any more of your writing.
Date: 01/22/20 01:23 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
A good chapter, with a nice mix of cuteness, intense action, and hints at where Civette's character arc is going. Thank you.
Also, thanks for the rec of "The Other World is Leaking". I read the first arc over the last few days and enjoyed it a lot.
Date: 01/11/20 11:35 am Title: Chapter 42: The Lying Cottage
Just caught up with the last few chapters and I'm loving the way you're starting what I suppose might be called book two or arc two. Civette is a fascinating character and I can't wait to see how she develops and what's up with her mom, the people who hired her, and so on.
Author's Response: Thank you! I have a lot of surprises and just plain silly fun planned for this book :3
Date: 12/28/19 02:40 am Title: Chapter 39: Return and Ambush
Caught up and looking forward to whatever comes next. X3
There were several moments that I really felt this story. I’m very jealous of Tami, both in how she discovered herself and how that got resolved. (Not of the dysphasia, that can be a right b****, no? But still, you get the idea)
Date: 12/25/19 12:24 am Title: Chapter 37: The Taylor Interlude Part 4
I’m sorry you felt hurt about my previous review. That wasn’t the goal.
Let me redeem myself by saying this : this entire piece of fiction (as well as the last chapter) is great. Don’t let the tiny detail I talked about earlier impact you as much as it did (maybe it didn’t, I don’t know).
Merry Christmas, and again, sorry for having been insensitive.
Date: 12/24/19 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 37: The Taylor Interlude Part 4
I hate the way you describe “stream snipers”. Didn’t say it before, but I will now.
You need to spend less time watching XQC and GreekGod other morons like that (and instead watch and follow actual nice human beings), because your perception of what stream sniping is is completely wrong AND biased.
And the main reason for that, is that stream sniping is ONLY annoying is a competitive setting, or when you tryhard for something. More often than not, these interactions create content for streamers and are highly enjoyable.
Anyway, thanks for the chapter. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the opinion I guess. I really needed to see something like that on Christmas morning. Super cool of you.
Date: 12/14/19 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
This story is so good. It builds slowly, but at this point is a giant ball of rolled together joys. The euphoria that it inspires in me is so valuable. I am patiently waiting for you to continue!
Your pacing is good, and your characters are adorable and so strong in their own ways. If I have any critique, it is that you could describe how the environments look, more. It definitely isn't necessary, but it could improve your work.
I do have a question, though. Was the "alchemy-improving bread" a question about Luvchiri/Ashley? I cannot think of a different answer, but you left so little to work off of. Actually, since one of the characters in that conversation is the main point of view, you could definitely have given her thoughts about what she was trying to ask. It is harder for a reader to get the answers to riddles than an author expects.
I wish you joy. I am sad that some people are so annoying that you felt you had to take down some of your stories. They were looking good too. But you know yourself best, and not bearing what you cannot bear is ever the best choice. Get yourself a big hug from someone you love for me, kay? : )
Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts!!! You're totally right about a lack of environmental description. I like to read a lot of lesbian romance fiction, just contemporary stuff, no fantasy or sci fi. I take a lot of inspiration from the genre, and something about those books is that they don't actually describe environment a lot. This doesn't really translate too well when you bring that style into a fantasy and sci-fi environment where that type of description is a large part of those genres, as well as being fairly important. I'll probably take that description crit into my next stories though. See how I can make it work! Thank you again!
Date: 12/05/19 11:01 am Title: Chapter 31: Nervous Ball of Quivering
1: good story
2: I personally believe may's part in this campaign of annoyance is that when someone dies in cora and is a target, first she helps them work through trauma the way she's 'supposed' to. And then makes them wait an extra 10 minutes to respawn. While she's playing Nyan Cat in the background. On Piano. Badly.
Date: 12/05/19 10:45 am Title: Chapter 20: Scorching Lips
absolutely gay and i absolutely love it. well, aside from the kidnapping.. but gay! definitely one of my favorite chapters.
can't wait for tami to return, there can never be enough gay. you're an amazing writer
Date: 12/05/19 09:58 am Title: Chapter 5: Dance Floor
Oh my gosh this was so freaking hot holy heck holy jeez omfg omfg omfg. I've had to reread it so many times because it's that good. (Also this scene marked the beginning of the end of my aceness. Not a big loss.) And then, not only was that that good, but the stuff leading up to it as well... that flirty freaking dance scene and the talk before it and... omg. Hot damn.
Date: 12/05/19 09:49 am Title: Chapter 4: Cheerful Woodchipper
THE DYSPHORIA. gosh make it sound so scary. (it is)
I loooove Taylor. She might actually be my favourite character! Even way back in the beginning here I loved seeing her pop up, it was always a highlight. Maybe that's not that strange considering that I'm pretty much Chiri, though...
I also love the other people she met, and how she met them... Also Aurguarugugugmmaurgm is the greatest himbo of all time.
Date: 12/05/19 09:45 am Title: Chapter 3: Fire Haired Girl
AND SO IT BEGINS! Gosh, her character's race, the fight scene... the *girl*...... Fudge, this is where it really gets good. *She fucking crushed a spider with her thighs*. Like... holy jeez. Talk about starting a story off with a bang.
Date: 12/05/19 09:41 am Title: Chapter 2: Character Creation
This chapter introduces *so much* good stuff for how Cora works and stuff, while simultaneously doing more worldbuilding, and it never even feels like it's taking time away from the good parts of the story. Also... the freaking ending of this chapter, gosh, it's so gooooooooood
Date: 12/05/19 03:55 am Title: Chapter 1: The Break Up
My favourite story of all time. This is an insanely wild ride, and it was all the way back in the beginning. The story was even wilder for me because it made me not ace anymore, so yeah, that's a thing. I love the characters in this story, and the worldbuilding, and gosh it's sooooo freaking fun to read holy heck. I'm so glad I was around to read this story. So very glad.
Date: 11/30/19 02:58 am Title: Chapter 34: The Taylor Interlude Part 1
Great story! I love the way you developed the MMO mechanics and have alluded to the world building pieces. This interlude is quite satisfying and I look forward to seeing the party formed for more 'WTF' strategies with even more shenanigans involved :D
Date: 11/22/19 06:55 am Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
I really liked this story. It's such a fun story that's still genuinely trans. It hits the hard points of being trans, but still keeps up the sci-fi/fantasy fun and comes to a nice end for the first book. I always get so absorbed in reading this, and when I hit the end of a chapter I'd be desperate for the next one to come.
I used this story to introduce a friend to trans fiction, and here's what they thought
"My heart aches
It’s so good but after reading it, I felt like I was Tami who had just left VR after her first week"
Thank you for your ridiculously fast work on this, Vale. I'm excited to read more of your stories as you write, especially College Steps ;)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Writing College Steps right now!
Date: 11/22/19 06:02 am Title: Chapter 1: The Break Up
This is an amazing story by an incredible author! All the rest of her works on TGST are outstanding and she also publishes on scribblehub. A consummate professional writer with a great future.
Author's Response: Thanks!!! I hope to get published! The dream!
Date: 11/20/19 07:04 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
That was a wonderful story :)... I'm hoping you do write the second part thou, as there are so many directions you could take this :)).... good thing. Just for starters there is a war to fight... they just haven't figured it out thou... in vr and out :). just a idea :).
Date: 11/20/19 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
I can't believe how fast we've come to the end of the first book. It literally feels like yesterday that I started reading it. I can very safely say that this will be one of the books that makes my rereading list, because I just don't want to leave this world yet.
Needless to say I'm waiting is rapt anticipation for Book 2 and 3 and however many books can take place to continue to watch Tami and Dawn. I want them to be the happiest couple ever; I may also be a little biased because they totally remind me of my wife and my's relationship.
Date: 11/19/19 07:49 am Title: Chapter 31: Nervous Ball of Quivering
May. Just May. Of course she'd have such silly ideas. It is better than what the other SAIs were planning but that is just too damn funny.
Aww April is trans too! My gay little heart is doing flips and flops for all of them. Friends in real life as well as the game! That makes me so happy.
Date: 11/19/19 06:57 am Title: Chapter 30: Shitposting as Combat
Too bad May missed Kristina. I get it, I get it, that would cause a lot more questions and problems for Tami. But there would be one less psychotic jackass running around looking to cause her trouble, the horned little bitch. The horned little demon needs to take her down.
Date: 11/19/19 06:08 am Title: Chapter 29: Matching Outfits
Oof, rabid fans are the worst. They don't know boundaries and want to know literally everything about who they worship. Yeah I am very happy Tami is finally herself but that is gonna complicate things irl so much!
Date: 11/18/19 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 32: SWAT
Wow! Looks like there will be another plate on the table at the Heaton house. Wish I could be a genetic girl and join their parade. What a story. Would it be possible for Dad's shaping pod to create a body for May? Does Taylor have the hots for April? I love every one of these characters. I'm excited for more.
Date: 11/16/19 11:06 am Title: Chapter 28: Euphoria and Drinking
Oh be still my heart that was so nerve wracking and so wholesome and so anxiety inducing and so relieving. I wasn't even supposed to still be reading. I need to get some sleep for later today but fuck me I'm still here lol I am so glad that Dawn was also understanding and willing to listen and accept Tami. I was really worried. Like REALLY really.
Now to go fuck Krissy up and live happily ever after 😂
I can't see Tami being famous in game as going well for her irl though... Yay...
Date: 11/16/19 10:38 am Title: Chapter 27: The Paper Thing
No! No no no no NO!!! How could you do that to Tami and Rora??? Aaaaaaand now I'm anxious again. Lovely. Oh well, just gonna drive me to read the next chapter immediately. Dammit and things were going so well too! Should have known that would mean you'd fuck them up again lol 😝😡
Date: 11/16/19 10:31 am Title: Chapter 27: The Paper Thing
“So… Efrideet, she lifts Saladin… over her head. And she says… She says, ‘I never miss.’” She murmured cryptically, an idea forming in her mind. Oh no, not again...
Oh those crazy Iron Lords. Gotta say that was by far my favorite dlc for D1. So yeah, I very much enjoyed that nice little reference. Back to reading this chapter
Date: 11/16/19 10:19 am Title: Chapter 26: What Vell Would Do
Must. Protect. The bean! The precious May-bean! That is absolutely traumatising for the poor kid!
So the other AI aren't doing their jobs and she is trying to take on so much to help everyone... Is this their government's way of trying to destroy her? Make her destroy herself? Fuckers.
Date: 11/15/19 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 30: Shitposting as Combat
"The english language needed more words I could heap at her feet as praise, like I was a royal supplicant begging for favour from a gorgeous queen."
and remind me never to piss of May Heaton. :P
Date: 11/15/19 09:35 am Title: Chapter 25: The Kid and Her Glasses
God DAMMIT girl, I said I am at work! Stop writing such steamy scenes!!! 😅
Seriously though why are you so good at writing amazing scenes? Cute scenes, like MaTRON and Tami, sad scenes, like with Kammi and poor poor Kalia (I'm still not over all you put her through), and steamy scenes like this. Rora is so wonderful too. So caring and concerned goes Tami. And also evil! I'd say "Poor Tami" but, well, I get a sneaking suspicion she enjoyed respawning a little more than most people 😂
So the government's of the world are trying to eradicate sentient AIs? Wouldn't have been a "problem" for them if they hadn't started making AI in the first place. But since they did why not just let it go? Seriously, trying to kill AI is a sure fire way to piss off an entirely new, accidental race!
Poor MaTRON. Girl seems so lonely and lost. And she is so caring too! She tried really hard to fix things and make things better when a god damn glitch happened (dammit Bethesda). Buuuuut on the other hand Tami is gonna look even more cool and badass. And the lightning in her eyes and hair sounds funny and awesome! Except for she now has literal static electricity running through her. Yikes.
Oh yeah, her and Rora both being Energy races? Since Rora hasn't said anything about it I can only assume that what happened to Tami didn't happen to her as well but that just makes me wonder how she too became an Energy race? Was that just the randomiser?
I miss Chiri by the way. Been so long since we've seen her. Hope she is okay. Also Rusti. Hope they managed to escape... But seeing the results of the executions I'm not holding my breath. They should have respawn if they were killed though so maybe, just maybe, they managed to get away.
Can't wait doe the showdown. Funny thing though it seems the adventurers already forgot just how under leveled they were.
Oh yeah and that just makes me wonder how and why this happened in a beginner country in the first place? Huh???
Date: 11/15/19 08:27 am Title: Chapter 24: The Storm
Oh fuck. Oh fuck oh fuck oh fuck OH FUCK. Of course you just fucking killed her! Because why not?!?! And MaTRON trying to keep her alive just "out of bounds" and then trying other things to keep her from going to the death dream is really stressful too. Oh I sure hope this doesn't fuck with her transitioning! Please no?
Date: 11/14/19 10:56 am Title: Chapter 22: Fists and Words
So many mixed feelings in this chapter. Near panic from falling for Rora the warm fuzzies and fluff at the end, confusion and worry on my part and Taylor's about Tami screaming in the pod and what MaTRON is doing. I mean I feel like I can trust this AI but on the other hand why did it lock Tami away? It was so very suspicious too the way the AI basically put Tami to sleep. I'm hoping it's because her mind being at rest would also help with whatever part of her the AI was working on irl. I hope.
Date: 11/14/19 10:19 am Title: Chapter 21: Hot bath
At first I was worried that MaTRON was something bad but now it's really seeming like this AI is actually here to help.
So I loved the Kammi stories I've read so far but I am absolutely adoring this one. It's just so perfect t and calls to me so much as a gamer myself.
Date: 11/14/19 08:03 am Title: Chapter 19: Dirge
Oh also we finally got some interaction with MaTRON! Yesssssss! And the way it was done was so funny too.
Hey by the way is it supposed to be spelled MaTRON with a small case a or just MATRON? Because if it was just a misspell then oh well but if it's supposed to be that way I get the feeling the designation means something and is somehow important.
Date: 11/14/19 07:55 am Title: Chapter 19: Dirge
Oh this got even MORE interesting and I didn't know that was possible! Captors? Blessed? These are the Pagutum guys? Probably should have guessed that one. And they want to study Tami? To try to find others? But who is holding an AI that powerful captive okayyyyyy that is a scary thought.