Date: 01/22/20 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
Loving Ryana, so cute! And we're super curious to find out what's Civette's deal. After this chapter, we're suddenly wondering if she might be plural... the sudden mood shifts & odd reactions remind us of switching.
Date: 01/22/20 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
This is great. I don't have the words honestly.
Civette is really curious and I can but really don't want to wait to know what is going on behind her somewhat grumpy face.
Having a dragon is cool. I don't have anything particular to comment about it, except that you have made it sound enjoyably cat-like.
I hope your survival is looking to continue, because if nothing else, the world would be lessened for not having any more of your writing.
Date: 01/22/20 01:23 pm Title: Chapter 46: The Door
A good chapter, with a nice mix of cuteness, intense action, and hints at where Civette's character arc is going. Thank you.
Also, thanks for the rec of "The Other World is Leaking". I read the first arc over the last few days and enjoyed it a lot.
Date: 01/11/20 11:35 am Title: Chapter 42: The Lying Cottage
Just caught up with the last few chapters and I'm loving the way you're starting what I suppose might be called book two or arc two. Civette is a fascinating character and I can't wait to see how she develops and what's up with her mom, the people who hired her, and so on.
Author's Response: Thank you! I have a lot of surprises and just plain silly fun planned for this book :3
Date: 12/28/19 02:40 am Title: Chapter 39: Return and Ambush
Caught up and looking forward to whatever comes next. X3
There were several moments that I really felt this story. I’m very jealous of Tami, both in how she discovered herself and how that got resolved. (Not of the dysphasia, that can be a right b****, no? But still, you get the idea)
Date: 12/25/19 12:24 am Title: Chapter 37: The Taylor Interlude Part 4
I’m sorry you felt hurt about my previous review. That wasn’t the goal.
Let me redeem myself by saying this : this entire piece of fiction (as well as the last chapter) is great. Don’t let the tiny detail I talked about earlier impact you as much as it did (maybe it didn’t, I don’t know).
Merry Christmas, and again, sorry for having been insensitive.
Date: 12/24/19 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 37: The Taylor Interlude Part 4
I hate the way you describe “stream snipers”. Didn’t say it before, but I will now.
You need to spend less time watching XQC and GreekGod other morons like that (and instead watch and follow actual nice human beings), because your perception of what stream sniping is is completely wrong AND biased.
And the main reason for that, is that stream sniping is ONLY annoying is a competitive setting, or when you tryhard for something. More often than not, these interactions create content for streamers and are highly enjoyable.
Anyway, thanks for the chapter. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the opinion I guess. I really needed to see something like that on Christmas morning. Super cool of you.
Date: 12/14/19 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
This story is so good. It builds slowly, but at this point is a giant ball of rolled together joys. The euphoria that it inspires in me is so valuable. I am patiently waiting for you to continue!
Your pacing is good, and your characters are adorable and so strong in their own ways. If I have any critique, it is that you could describe how the environments look, more. It definitely isn't necessary, but it could improve your work.
I do have a question, though. Was the "alchemy-improving bread" a question about Luvchiri/Ashley? I cannot think of a different answer, but you left so little to work off of. Actually, since one of the characters in that conversation is the main point of view, you could definitely have given her thoughts about what she was trying to ask. It is harder for a reader to get the answers to riddles than an author expects.
I wish you joy. I am sad that some people are so annoying that you felt you had to take down some of your stories. They were looking good too. But you know yourself best, and not bearing what you cannot bear is ever the best choice. Get yourself a big hug from someone you love for me, kay? : )
Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts!!! You're totally right about a lack of environmental description. I like to read a lot of lesbian romance fiction, just contemporary stuff, no fantasy or sci fi. I take a lot of inspiration from the genre, and something about those books is that they don't actually describe environment a lot. This doesn't really translate too well when you bring that style into a fantasy and sci-fi environment where that type of description is a large part of those genres, as well as being fairly important. I'll probably take that description crit into my next stories though. See how I can make it work! Thank you again!
Date: 12/05/19 11:01 am Title: Chapter 31: Nervous Ball of Quivering
1: good story
2: I personally believe may's part in this campaign of annoyance is that when someone dies in cora and is a target, first she helps them work through trauma the way she's 'supposed' to. And then makes them wait an extra 10 minutes to respawn. While she's playing Nyan Cat in the background. On Piano. Badly.
Date: 12/05/19 10:45 am Title: Chapter 20: Scorching Lips
absolutely gay and i absolutely love it. well, aside from the kidnapping.. but gay! definitely one of my favorite chapters.
can't wait for tami to return, there can never be enough gay. you're an amazing writer
Date: 12/05/19 09:58 am Title: Chapter 5: Dance Floor
Oh my gosh this was so freaking hot holy heck holy jeez omfg omfg omfg. I've had to reread it so many times because it's that good. (Also this scene marked the beginning of the end of my aceness. Not a big loss.) And then, not only was that that good, but the stuff leading up to it as well... that flirty freaking dance scene and the talk before it and... omg. Hot damn.
Date: 12/05/19 09:49 am Title: Chapter 4: Cheerful Woodchipper
THE DYSPHORIA. gosh make it sound so scary. (it is)
I loooove Taylor. She might actually be my favourite character! Even way back in the beginning here I loved seeing her pop up, it was always a highlight. Maybe that's not that strange considering that I'm pretty much Chiri, though...
I also love the other people she met, and how she met them... Also Aurguarugugugmmaurgm is the greatest himbo of all time.
Date: 12/05/19 09:45 am Title: Chapter 3: Fire Haired Girl
AND SO IT BEGINS! Gosh, her character's race, the fight scene... the *girl*...... Fudge, this is where it really gets good. *She fucking crushed a spider with her thighs*. Like... holy jeez. Talk about starting a story off with a bang.
Date: 12/05/19 09:41 am Title: Chapter 2: Character Creation
This chapter introduces *so much* good stuff for how Cora works and stuff, while simultaneously doing more worldbuilding, and it never even feels like it's taking time away from the good parts of the story. Also... the freaking ending of this chapter, gosh, it's so gooooooooood
Date: 12/05/19 03:55 am Title: Chapter 1: The Break Up
My favourite story of all time. This is an insanely wild ride, and it was all the way back in the beginning. The story was even wilder for me because it made me not ace anymore, so yeah, that's a thing. I love the characters in this story, and the worldbuilding, and gosh it's sooooo freaking fun to read holy heck. I'm so glad I was around to read this story. So very glad.
Date: 11/30/19 02:58 am Title: Chapter 34: The Taylor Interlude Part 1
Great story! I love the way you developed the MMO mechanics and have alluded to the world building pieces. This interlude is quite satisfying and I look forward to seeing the party formed for more 'WTF' strategies with even more shenanigans involved :D
Date: 11/22/19 06:55 am Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
I really liked this story. It's such a fun story that's still genuinely trans. It hits the hard points of being trans, but still keeps up the sci-fi/fantasy fun and comes to a nice end for the first book. I always get so absorbed in reading this, and when I hit the end of a chapter I'd be desperate for the next one to come.
I used this story to introduce a friend to trans fiction, and here's what they thought
"My heart aches
It’s so good but after reading it, I felt like I was Tami who had just left VR after her first week"
Thank you for your ridiculously fast work on this, Vale. I'm excited to read more of your stories as you write, especially College Steps ;)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! Writing College Steps right now!
Date: 11/22/19 06:02 am Title: Chapter 1: The Break Up
This is an amazing story by an incredible author! All the rest of her works on TGST are outstanding and she also publishes on scribblehub. A consummate professional writer with a great future.
Author's Response: Thanks!!! I hope to get published! The dream!
Date: 11/20/19 07:04 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
That was a wonderful story :)... I'm hoping you do write the second part thou, as there are so many directions you could take this :)).... good thing. Just for starters there is a war to fight... they just haven't figured it out thou... in vr and out :). just a idea :).
Date: 11/20/19 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 33: Uhaul
I can't believe how fast we've come to the end of the first book. It literally feels like yesterday that I started reading it. I can very safely say that this will be one of the books that makes my rereading list, because I just don't want to leave this world yet.
Needless to say I'm waiting is rapt anticipation for Book 2 and 3 and however many books can take place to continue to watch Tami and Dawn. I want them to be the happiest couple ever; I may also be a little biased because they totally remind me of my wife and my's relationship.
Date: 11/19/19 07:49 am Title: Chapter 31: Nervous Ball of Quivering
May. Just May. Of course she'd have such silly ideas. It is better than what the other SAIs were planning but that is just too damn funny.
Aww April is trans too! My gay little heart is doing flips and flops for all of them. Friends in real life as well as the game! That makes me so happy.
Date: 11/19/19 06:57 am Title: Chapter 30: Shitposting as Combat
Too bad May missed Kristina. I get it, I get it, that would cause a lot more questions and problems for Tami. But there would be one less psychotic jackass running around looking to cause her trouble, the horned little bitch. The horned little demon needs to take her down.
Date: 11/19/19 06:08 am Title: Chapter 29: Matching Outfits
Oof, rabid fans are the worst. They don't know boundaries and want to know literally everything about who they worship. Yeah I am very happy Tami is finally herself but that is gonna complicate things irl so much!
Date: 11/18/19 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 32: SWAT
Wow! Looks like there will be another plate on the table at the Heaton house. Wish I could be a genetic girl and join their parade. What a story. Would it be possible for Dad's shaping pod to create a body for May? Does Taylor have the hots for April? I love every one of these characters. I'm excited for more.
Date: 11/16/19 11:06 am Title: Chapter 28: Euphoria and Drinking
Oh be still my heart that was so nerve wracking and so wholesome and so anxiety inducing and so relieving. I wasn't even supposed to still be reading. I need to get some sleep for later today but fuck me I'm still here lol I am so glad that Dawn was also understanding and willing to listen and accept Tami. I was really worried. Like REALLY really.
Now to go fuck Krissy up and live happily ever after 😂
I can't see Tami being famous in game as going well for her irl though... Yay...
Date: 11/16/19 10:38 am Title: Chapter 27: The Paper Thing
No! No no no no NO!!! How could you do that to Tami and Rora??? Aaaaaaand now I'm anxious again. Lovely. Oh well, just gonna drive me to read the next chapter immediately. Dammit and things were going so well too! Should have known that would mean you'd fuck them up again lol 😝😡
Date: 11/16/19 10:31 am Title: Chapter 27: The Paper Thing
“So… Efrideet, she lifts Saladin… over her head. And she says… She says, ‘I never miss.’” She murmured cryptically, an idea forming in her mind. Oh no, not again...
Oh those crazy Iron Lords. Gotta say that was by far my favorite dlc for D1. So yeah, I very much enjoyed that nice little reference. Back to reading this chapter
Date: 11/16/19 10:19 am Title: Chapter 26: What Vell Would Do
Must. Protect. The bean! The precious May-bean! That is absolutely traumatising for the poor kid!
So the other AI aren't doing their jobs and she is trying to take on so much to help everyone... Is this their government's way of trying to destroy her? Make her destroy herself? Fuckers.
Date: 11/15/19 11:24 pm Title: Chapter 30: Shitposting as Combat
"The english language needed more words I could heap at her feet as praise, like I was a royal supplicant begging for favour from a gorgeous queen."
and remind me never to piss of May Heaton. :P
Date: 11/15/19 09:35 am Title: Chapter 25: The Kid and Her Glasses
God DAMMIT girl, I said I am at work! Stop writing such steamy scenes!!! 😅
Seriously though why are you so good at writing amazing scenes? Cute scenes, like MaTRON and Tami, sad scenes, like with Kammi and poor poor Kalia (I'm still not over all you put her through), and steamy scenes like this. Rora is so wonderful too. So caring and concerned goes Tami. And also evil! I'd say "Poor Tami" but, well, I get a sneaking suspicion she enjoyed respawning a little more than most people 😂
So the government's of the world are trying to eradicate sentient AIs? Wouldn't have been a "problem" for them if they hadn't started making AI in the first place. But since they did why not just let it go? Seriously, trying to kill AI is a sure fire way to piss off an entirely new, accidental race!
Poor MaTRON. Girl seems so lonely and lost. And she is so caring too! She tried really hard to fix things and make things better when a god damn glitch happened (dammit Bethesda). Buuuuut on the other hand Tami is gonna look even more cool and badass. And the lightning in her eyes and hair sounds funny and awesome! Except for she now has literal static electricity running through her. Yikes.
Oh yeah, her and Rora both being Energy races? Since Rora hasn't said anything about it I can only assume that what happened to Tami didn't happen to her as well but that just makes me wonder how she too became an Energy race? Was that just the randomiser?
I miss Chiri by the way. Been so long since we've seen her. Hope she is okay. Also Rusti. Hope they managed to escape... But seeing the results of the executions I'm not holding my breath. They should have respawn if they were killed though so maybe, just maybe, they managed to get away.
Can't wait doe the showdown. Funny thing though it seems the adventurers already forgot just how under leveled they were.
Oh yeah and that just makes me wonder how and why this happened in a beginner country in the first place? Huh???
Date: 11/15/19 08:27 am Title: Chapter 24: The Storm
Oh fuck. Oh fuck oh fuck oh fuck OH FUCK. Of course you just fucking killed her! Because why not?!?! And MaTRON trying to keep her alive just "out of bounds" and then trying other things to keep her from going to the death dream is really stressful too. Oh I sure hope this doesn't fuck with her transitioning! Please no?
Date: 11/14/19 10:56 am Title: Chapter 22: Fists and Words
So many mixed feelings in this chapter. Near panic from falling for Rora the warm fuzzies and fluff at the end, confusion and worry on my part and Taylor's about Tami screaming in the pod and what MaTRON is doing. I mean I feel like I can trust this AI but on the other hand why did it lock Tami away? It was so very suspicious too the way the AI basically put Tami to sleep. I'm hoping it's because her mind being at rest would also help with whatever part of her the AI was working on irl. I hope.
Date: 11/14/19 10:19 am Title: Chapter 21: Hot bath
At first I was worried that MaTRON was something bad but now it's really seeming like this AI is actually here to help.
So I loved the Kammi stories I've read so far but I am absolutely adoring this one. It's just so perfect t and calls to me so much as a gamer myself.
Date: 11/14/19 08:03 am Title: Chapter 19: Dirge
Oh also we finally got some interaction with MaTRON! Yesssssss! And the way it was done was so funny too.
Hey by the way is it supposed to be spelled MaTRON with a small case a or just MATRON? Because if it was just a misspell then oh well but if it's supposed to be that way I get the feeling the designation means something and is somehow important.
Date: 11/14/19 07:55 am Title: Chapter 19: Dirge
Oh this got even MORE interesting and I didn't know that was possible! Captors? Blessed? These are the Pagutum guys? Probably should have guessed that one. And they want to study Tami? To try to find others? But who is holding an AI that powerful captive okayyyyyy that is a scary thought.
Date: 11/13/19 10:29 am Title: Chapter 19: Dirge
MaTRON here to help, hmm? Okay why does the AI wish to help Tami so much? I mean it's great that she has help but why? Who designed the AI?
I've heard mentions from some of the others about the dystopian side of the world I've yet to get to. I love dystopian stories and setting. So I can't wait to see where this goes.
Date: 11/12/19 10:11 am Title: Chapter 17: MaTRON
This just keeps making me want to play Skyrim again.
Holy Chiri girl!
Okay something is obviously going on but as we saw with Kammi and Songbird I can't guess anything to save my life. Unless its little things like that one person being that one "hero" and Dawn being Rora (small spoilers but if you are reading reviews before the story literally why?). So I won't even begin to try to guess at what is going on with MaTRON, the war between two nations but one is acting really weird (like the vendor and child). Vague thought right now but something in the game is obviously helping Tami and something else doesn't like her. Can't wait to read more and find out what's going on.
Date: 11/12/19 08:33 am Title: Chapter 15: Options
I had thoughts I wanted to write out when I read this chapter. Unfortunately it got busy at work and it's been a few days since then.
I loved this chapter. I loved how accepting Taylor was. I loved how accepting Tami's parents were. I love that there are options like shaping clinics. Wish that were real. But this was just such a wholesome chapter overall and it gave me many feel-good feels.
Author's Response: Thank youuu!!!
Date: 11/08/19 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 28: Euphoria and Drinking
Ah, yes, the "let's just take it slow/let's just be friends to start" approach. My wife and I did that when we first started dating. Our resolve lasted approximately 12 hours, at which point we had our first kiss.
I suspect Dawn and Tami won't even make it that long :-P
Date: 11/08/19 08:50 am Title: Chapter 14: Distraction
Okie, good. They are friends again. Goodness. They both need that. Lot less apprehensive about it now.
What I am really worried about now is Kristina. She can go right ahead and yeet herself off the nearest bridge, that controlling, manipulative, abusive, self centered, narcissistic little bitch. Goddess I hate her!
Date: 11/08/19 08:34 am Title: Chapter 14: Distraction
“Someone else said something similar to me pretty recently. She didn’t want to tell me either, but she seemed to cheer up when we found some distractions,”
Fuck. Dawn is Aurora, isn't she? I am both apprehensive as shit about this and hopeful that maybe they can work things out. But fuck! Damn it all why'd you have to go and add that layer to complicate things? I love it. I hate it. I need more of it.
Date: 11/08/19 08:24 am Title: Chapter 12: Pirates!
Something I forgot to mention. The intriguing storyline in the game. It's got my attention hardcore. Skyrim will always be one of my favorite games of all times (looking forward heavily to the new Elder Scroll game) and the lore and history there was ripe with racism and strife like that. It was always interesting to see those things. But this is different. A racist empire hiring the very people they are racist against? Kinda slightly reminds me of how the Empire on Star Wars eventually ended up conscripting aliens into their ranks despite being heavily racist against any non humans. I am thoroughly intrigued.
Date: 11/08/19 07:36 am Title: Chapter 12: Pirates!
Dammit, my heart just broke for Tami. That poor girl. The ending of this chapter is so sad! I was just thinking about this and how she would feel having to leave herself behind in the game. Dammit dammit dammit, now I'm sad.
Date: 11/08/19 03:41 am Title: Chapter 28: Euphoria and Drinking
So, um, I don't know how to say this, but...this chapter is literally the cutest, most warm and fuzzy thing I've ever read on this site. Thank you for this story so far
Author's Response: Thank you for reading it!! :D