Date: 11/23/19 10:53 pm Title: Chapter 7; Everybody Knows:
"Steph and I are in the backseat as we are not old enough to sit upfront, I’m not used to this."
I suppose it depends on the state, but in my state the ability to sit up front is based on both age and weight. So even though he was 15 before, at less than 85 pounds he couldn't legally sit in the front seat. That being said, I think it's funny she got banished to the back seat. How humiliating.
Date: 11/03/19 11:52 am Title: Chapter 19: And in the end, and Epilogue;
Very interesting and simple. It needs an editor to help with the formatting and errors that appear now and then. But overall very nice.
Author's Response: Have someone working on it. Will be done very soon.
Date: 11/01/19 07:38 pm Title: Chapter 2 A bad day off beats a good day at school….most of the time;
Still fast reading action, although did the IV needle hert, was the stuff warm when it went in? Excellent reaction to the coughing.
Author's Response: Nah, I get enough IVs that when someone does enough they don't hurt. I have a cronic cough, so I'm kinda an expert.
Date: 11/01/19 01:04 am Title: Chapter 1 Bullied;
There's quite a few grammatical errors in the story, along with wrong word usage. The story itself isn't bad, but your writing could probably improve. This story could benefit from someone proofreading it.
Author's Response: I have someone doing that now. Grammar was never my best subject.
Date: 09/16/19 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 1 Bullied;
The lack of spacing between paragraphs and not having a line break between speakers makes this kinda hard to read.
Author's Response: It's because something happens when I cut and paste. In word I have more spaces. I have to figure this out. My first book, of course I'll have bugs.
Date: 09/15/19 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 15; Here comes Santa Claus:
I love how you are developing the family members. It makes me wish my family was like this!
Author's Response: Thank you for the nice review! It's the hard part, keeping names straight. I use a lot of notes.
Date: 09/14/19 11:04 am Title: Chapter 12: Brain shrinking 101:
I started following this story late, but am enjoying it. I do hope you continue to post regular updates. I will be watching for them.
Author's Response: I am posting 3 updates a day. It is a completed story. Thank you for your review.