Date: 09/06/19 12:14 am Title: You didn't tell me!
... My real life name is Samantha. My deadname is Justin. WHAT ARE THE ODDS THE TWO SIDE CHARACTERS INY OUR STORY ARE JUSTIN AND SAMANTHA I AM FREAKING OUT.
Author's Response: That is pretty freaky. I chose the names at complete random.
Date: 09/05/19 09:47 pm Title: You didn't tell me!
I like the characters, especially Todd's father, and the situation is promising; I look forward to seeing where you go with future chapters. There are a lot of tense errors, though, where you randomly switch into present tense for a sentence or two and then back to past tense. Either is fine, but pick one and stick with it. There are a few other typos, but the tense switches are the most distracting thing that threw me out of the story a lot.
Author's Response: I apologize, I am a complete scatter brain. I'm usually doing a couple things at once while I'm writing. I am trying to keep it in present tense but I guess I missed that while I was reading back through it. I've already got the second chapter written and I will go back through it carefully before I post it.