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Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 03/04/19 12:00 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

I really like that story

Reviewer: Zsuzsi Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/07/14 02:31 am Title: A Well Timed Switch

Hey - nothing wrong with a short-and-sweet concept piece! And this was a nicely executed one. Sure, it's rushed, but I found it quite enjoyable, and as a seed for later writing this kind of thing can be a lot of good, clean fun.

Good show!

Reviewer: MatureDarlaTvPet Signed Report
Date: 02/06/13 12:44 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

good story. will there be more?

Reviewer: Anna Rainstorm Signed starstarstarhalf-star Report
Date: 12/29/12 07:53 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

Pay no heed to the other reviewers. Plots and character developments are all well and good for longer stories, but sometimes all you want is a 'quickie'. This stood well enough on its own and at the length it is. The appox age of the characters can be gleaned from the fact she is rooming at college, thier relationship seems to be fairly solid given she is ok with his crossdressing. All these little background details are either there to be found or else they are irrelevent.

Reviewer: joannebarbarella Signed starstarstarhalf-star Report
Date: 09/23/12 12:57 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

You have the potential. Like the other reviewers said....take it a little slower. Describe your characters. How old are they? What has their relationship been to date? Do they love each other or is it just sex? Background details?

Reviewer: Lujonas Signed starstarstar Report
Date: 09/22/12 11:48 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

I agree with Jolene. There's not a lot of "story." It's pretty rushed. I think there's potential in the story, but it would be better if there was a plot before it that explained everything.

Reviewer: Jolene Middleton Signed Report
Date: 09/22/12 06:42 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch

This has potential. My first thought is WHY this happened (it's kind of a cheat to let the reader hang on an important plot hole). There is also a sense of rushing through the story without significant character development. Also pay close attention to spacing (it's probably a byproduct of cut-and-paste, but it looks bad). I suggest letting it sit for a bit, then revisit it for another draft. Oh, and one more thing: eight inches? Really?

Author's Response: Thanks you guys, it was a bit rushed, I did it up quickly last night and was really tired :/ I'm sorry it showed, I guess I'm a little confused about character development, what could i do to further it a bit?

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