Date: 08/07/14 02:31 am Title: A Well Timed Switch
Hey - nothing wrong with a short-and-sweet concept piece! And this was a nicely executed one. Sure, it's rushed, but I found it quite enjoyable, and as a seed for later writing this kind of thing can be a lot of good, clean fun.
Date: 12/29/12 07:53 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch
Pay no heed to the other reviewers. Plots and character developments are all well and good for longer stories, but sometimes all you want is a 'quickie'. This stood well enough on its own and at the length it is. The appox age of the characters can be gleaned from the fact she is rooming at college, thier relationship seems to be fairly solid given she is ok with his crossdressing. All these little background details are either there to be found or else they are irrelevent.
Date: 09/23/12 12:57 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch
You have the potential. Like the other reviewers said....take it a little slower. Describe your characters. How old are they? What has their relationship been to date? Do they love each other or is it just sex? Background details?
Date: 09/22/12 06:42 pm Title: A Well Timed Switch
This has potential. My first thought is WHY this happened (it's kind of a cheat to let the reader hang on an important plot hole). There is also a sense of rushing through the story without significant character development. Also pay close attention to spacing (it's probably a byproduct of cut-and-paste, but it looks bad). I suggest letting it sit for a bit, then revisit it for another draft. Oh, and one more thing: eight inches? Really?
Author's Response: Thanks you guys, it was a bit rushed, I did it up quickly last night and was really tired :/ I'm sorry it showed, I guess I'm a little confused about character development, what could i do to further it a bit?