Date: 09/03/19 07:26 am Title: Chapter 1
What fascinates me about _Wit-Sec_ comes from the emotional truths it presents. This exploration of "becoming the mask" to this degree... for lack of a better phrase... feels real. Even the business about her genuinely believing that Nick, her own ex-partner, could have been bribed to kill her... It's an eloquent summary of the life horrible life she left behind, serving to put the new life she bulit from the components provided by "Wit-Sec" into sharpest possible contrast.
Likewise, the genuine tenderness of the gestures between her and Shaun, not to mention the unconscious reactions Nick experiences from her feminine mannerisms...
Sublime, my friend.
A true "transformation" story staying within the confines of "believability", and thanks very much for sharing it!
Date: 08/24/19 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Liked the story, except for one thing. I now have to change the name of a story I'm writing for the second time. I originally called it Witness Protection, then someone wrote a story with that name so I changed it to Wit Sec and now you wrote this one.
My fault, I refuse to publish an unfinished story and at 12,000 words I'm just starting it with 3 others to be published before it.
Anyway, loved your story.
Date: 08/13/19 08:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was quite good, very emotionally affecting.
At first I wondered how, if Alan doesn't know anything about April in witness protection, he's going along with this fake baby bump and the fake labor to cover up the adoption. That seems impossible to conceal from the husband she's sleeping with. Then I realized she was lying about Alan not knowing about her past, at least in general terms, because she thought at that point that Nick was bribed by Caruso to kill her, and she wanted to make sure he killed only her and not Alan or Shaun.
Author's Response: Thank you for an insightful review! I always love hearing readers tell me they cared enough about a story to think critically about what was going on. Speaking of which, I make it a point to never argue with a reader's take on a story. I figure if they make sense, a reader's conclusions are every bit as valid as mine. And your analysis of April's statement that Alan "doesn't know anything about any of this" is certainly both logical and consistent with the rest of the text. My own conclusion is that she was saying Alan didn't know anything about anything with regard to Cursano's operations or whereabouts or whatever that would make him a threat and thus someone Nick needed to 'take care of.' But as I say; your analysis works too and shows you were reading with an eye to detail. And that's all I ever really want. :)