Date: 08/29/19 05:16 am Title: Chapter 1: Intervention
Ok, that's fascinating and I was clearly misinterpreting the moons statement about what didn't work, as it was intended for the inhaler and not the drugs. That's a really clever choice of mechanic that could go a lot of ways depending on how you want to swing it.
Date: 08/28/19 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 9: Rest
Another exquisite story as usual, Rosilys.
I'm having a devil of a time figuring out what you've done to the laws of physics here. You mention that there are 2 things total that have changed, we know that a variety of chemistry is fucked, and we know that all electronics is busted.
I'm going to make a guess and say that one of the things is the conductivity of metal. If that changed, all modern electronics would be instantly bricked, but there would be little to no effects on living creatures or other visible structures, etc. Perhaps if metals act more like ceramics somehow, that could explain the lack of orbital debris burnup, since most debris will be largely metal.
The other change is harder, because this is the chemistry one. We know that Fiona's medication no longer works. We know that gunpowder (smokeless powder probably) burns, but like a candle, very slowly. We know that the moon suspects orbital debris may not burn up in atmosphere, but that's unconfirmed. Smokeless powder is mostly driven by nitro groups. Medications are highly complex chemical interactions between a variety of molecules. Orbital debris burning up in the atmosphere is the odd one out, because that's mostly just friction, but that could have been explained by the metal change.
The smokeless powder leads me to think you've screwed with the table of elements and the bond energy between atoms, but that kind of change would have enormous ramifications that would be a pain in the ass to puzzle out for lore consistency. If it were normal gunpowder instead of smokeless powder, it leads to similar questions. Gunpowder is mostly driven by oxidation of sulfur/carbon by oxygen release by KNO3, and you could slow it down by releasing less oxygen, making the oxygen a less aggressive oxidizer, or changing how the carbon and sulfur react with the oxygen. The problem is that pretty much any of these changes would result in royally fucking organic chemistry, so everything would just die.
Honestly, you've got me stumped on this one. My guess will be some vague waving of hands in the direction of molecular chemistry, but I've got nothing past that.
Author's Response: Alright I give in. Gasses no longer compress and decompress in the same way :P
Date: 08/28/19 01:59 pm Title: Chapter 9: Rest
I really hope moon can help Delphi find a cure disease spell of some sort. Fi and Delphi sitting in a tree... they are just so damn cute together. Hmm while modern inventions dont seem to work I wonder then if older methods of 'alchemy' would. Our modern knowledge comes an awful lot from our understanding of science but since up until the early 1900's we didnt have the kind of knowledge. I wonder then if we should be able tobfind ourselves not in medieval era living conditions, well not for long anyways, but instead into early or late 1800's just now with magic being the replacement for advanced tech. I can see a kind of D&D Ebberon situation happening here. Building materials might be fundamentally weaker but what if you can enchant things now? Maybe enchantment and alchemy now involving magic will be able to make up that gap that now exists. Of course for most places they will regress to probably somewhere near late 1700 or early to mid1800. I just have never been able to see the idea with apocalypse kinds of stories that we'd automatically go medieval when the apocalypse happens. I mean its not like thousands of years of understanding through trial and 3rror just vanish, especially in situations involving magic. Ooohhh maybe Delphi is capable of enchanting armor into mitheral. Anyways Im rambling, thanks for the chapter
Date: 08/24/19 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 7: Intimidation Tactics
Inconsistency, electricity doesn't work, but the safe was unlocked with codes? I doubt very much that it was an old fashioned manual combination safe. Whatever this power is, is very capricious and selective in what it nullifies. There's no reason for guns not to operate. It's the same physics as fire. Obviously, only some electrical doesn't work. Physics and chemistry could not have been altered. All animals operate on electric principles. They're still working. No, whatever is doing this is being very selective in what it affects. Certainly, it is not bigger than the universe. There's something rotten going on.
Author's Response: It was a manual combination safe. There is two total things that have changed.
Date: 08/24/19 11:46 am Title: Chapter 8: Walking Fire
Yeah major cities would probably be the most likely to be affected by these elemental beings during the early days of the change over. Chances are that city populations will become far more like they were in ancient times, smaller than larger. Actually one thing I am curious about is if modern inventions and creations dont work, such as something like gunpowder which isnt exactly a new, then how is it Fionas medicine will work or even her inhaler? What determines the inventions that dont work beyond the ones that do?
Date: 08/22/19 12:33 am Title: Chapter 7: Intimidation Tactics
Poor Mr. Weelock, I hope he gets back to his family and they're okay.
Delphie needs to start training her skillz. I think she can do that while they're walking 200 miles, a bit at a time. Oo, zap that leaf! Levitate that squirrel! Heal this blister! Start a campfire! And so on.
Also, they need a weelbarrow or cart. A grocery store shopping cart would be a huge benefit. Even a simple dolly for moving boxes would help, especially since you can drag it over anything. I've dragged some really heavy stuff up a lot of stairs, so I know. If it's strong enough to move my fridge, it's strong enough to move a pile of swords and whatnot.
They also need a dog. Dogs are really good at barking at stuff, like weirdos in bronze masks sneaking up on your campsite. And squirrels. Including levitating squirrels.
Author's Response: Oh they'll get a dog ;). You are correct on all fronts!
Date: 08/17/19 04:11 am Title: Chapter 6: A Girl in Armour
Whatever happened seems to be randomly selective in what it affects. There is no rhyme or reason as to what works and what doesn't. The laws of chemistry no longer seem to be fixed. There is absolutely no reason firearms shouldn't work. .Something out there is arbitrarily deciding what works and what doesn't. This reminds me of a story I read about a group who are the first to travel to another star system. The laws of physics were no longer applicable on Earth. A universe should be consistent with with its laws. That should be the way here. That means some being is playing with them. That being must be eliminated.
Date: 08/10/19 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 5: Burning Sky
Hey Vale, you said before that on site reviews were good, so im doing my goddess bound duty! Honestly though, i love your writing style. Captivating and eloquent, polished and engaging content. The emotions of the characters are identifiable and relatable, sometimes almost too much! Keep up the writing and never forget that we are all cheering for you!
Author's Response: THANK YOU!!
Date: 08/02/19 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Bathtub That Didn't Explode
I had no idea how much i needed more of your writing. This story looks amazing and i cannot wait for more. ugh my work has me out of town for ten days at a time and because of TG's weird new internet setup I cant access the page when away. So, this was a huge breath of fresh air to come home to, thank you. Also cant wait for more Pellan and Falling Over
Author's Response: Falling Over soon! I've also uploaded it to Scribblehub for those who can't access it all the time. The rest of my stories will be going up there at some point too. Thank you so much for reading my stories!
Date: 07/30/19 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Bathtub That Didn't Explode
I've been reading on Patreon, and it's very interesting so far. It's cool having a third universe, likely linked to your broader multiverse given the mechanism of change (spontaneous global reality distortion).
I really like how you went for realism with the ammunition here, too. It seems that the laws of physics have changed slightly, screwing up sensitive mechanisms like ammunition and electronics.
Still, as long as they stay consistent, I can't see technology staying stagnant for more than a year or so. Tests will be done, numbers will be reestablished, and designs will be adjusted to work in the new reality. In the short-term, though, all the existing tech is screwed.
Author's Response: You're saying that like a huge portion of the world's population isn't going to starve to death in the next few years :P
Date: 07/30/19 04:12 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Bathtub That Didn't Explode
Oh wow! I love where this is going (as usual with your stories ;). Is this part of the Kammiverse ? And your writing, it's just sooo good, it flows so naturally, I'm just immediately sent to a world of imagination by your words :)
Date: 07/30/19 02:38 pm Title: Chapter 4: The Bathtub That Didn't Explode
Hmmm they definitely have an advantage with all the cool stuff Fiona has, and until Elph learns how to use her magic Fiona will most likely be taking the lead for the moment.
Thank you for the chapters, can't wait to read more of this wonderful new story
Date: 07/30/19 02:16 pm Title: Chapter 3: Breaking and Fashioning
Im surprise the gun with the man didn't go off, guess guns are obsolete and knives and baseball bats will be the new go to weapons. Also I chuckled at the stupidity of the group of people raiding the electronic store, won't they feel like idiots when they actually take a look around and realize there is no power for electronics to even work with.