Date: 12/10/19 02:42 pm Title: Tentacles of Truth
„Well did the reveal come as a surprise or did you suspect it?“
Well kind of. I thought those parts with his coworkers were her past consciousness trying to fight the change. That her past self died in another way was surprising. Also the whole last paragraph did strike as a surprise to me, I was actually very happy with a shy main character but it seems that that will change :/
Author's Response: Thank you, I greatly appreciate your feedback. The final paragraph is indicative that she is willing to change and strive for the better. She's accepting her unknown fate and is willing to embrace it wholeheartedly as she finally believes it in her heart that she is Luna. And her determination to achieve more confidence and stop living the life others expect of her doesn't mean she will lose her innocence or shyness. Rather she's going to let her personality and life bloom on its own accordance for the first time, and damn anyone who wants to stop her. So if she wants to become Luna the shy and cute cat girl, she's resolving to never let anyone stop her. Anyways, sorry for the long response. I'm very appreciative you took your time to read and think about my story.
Date: 11/13/19 11:08 am Title: Speed
Sounds like a horrible accident that happened to you, my condolences! Also happy to hear that you managed to survive and are recovering, you will manage!:) Very nice chapter, let’s see how this whole thing with Mr. Roboto will turn out. His backstory is quite fascinating, maybe they will manage somehow. Hyped for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you, I have been recovering well. I'm glad you are enjoying the story.
Date: 11/13/19 03:20 am Title: Curiosity Killed the Cat - Part 1
Glad to hear you’re recovering. I had hoped that Mr. Roboto would be Luna’s friend, but I guess maybe things are not as they seem.
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. And well I wouldn't count Mr. Roboto out just yet, hint, hint. So please stay tuned.
Date: 10/14/19 01:23 am Title: Farewell Mr. Roboto
Thanks for the chapter! Your story is awesome so far, hoping that we will get to some civilization soon ^^
Author's Response: Thank you for the comment I appreciated it. Civilization/ city life is coming and will be in the second arc. Being a new writer I didn't have the stories full idea nailed down at first back when I started writing it. Honestly this was just kinda a writing experiment at first as I didn't expect this story to go anywhere or even have anyone read it. But the further I progressed and the more I wrote, the more invested I became. Soon enough the story just took on a life of its own and now I'm having a lot of fun telling it. I just hope the translation from the cluttered mess inside my head is translating well to something the reader will enjoy. I'll admit the first arc is a bit dry, but just wait until we get to the second arc. In some aspects I kinda wish the story started at the second arc instead, but at the same time I really wanted to get Luna's character settled before diving headfirst into what's coming. So the good news is we're now in the final three chapters of the first arc which will wrap up the major character growth I planned for Luna. So stay tuned for chapter 11 where arc 2 starts and the Korrupted Angels are introduced.
Date: 10/11/19 02:02 am Title: Farewell Mr. Roboto
I know you said you are new to writing, but reading what you wrote I can safely say that you are clearly a gifted writer. I hope you continue this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. Sorry my updates are a bit slower than I'd like them to be. I definitely have lots of plans and many more chapters coming, so please stay tuned.
Date: 08/15/19 11:24 pm Title: Awaken in a world gone mad
Hi Rayven! I like the story so far - it definitely has some possibilities. I'd love to see more when you're ready!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking your time to read my story I really appreciate it. I really loved your story "Big Damn Heroes." Actually got a bit of inspiration from that one to write this. Let me know if there's anything I could work on as since this my first story I'm pretty figuring it out as I go. But definitely got more plans coming from this story, new chapter hopefully uploading soon, once I finish revising and cleaning it up. No spoilers, but the next chapter is when the story will start picking up the pace and get more exciting. Thanks again.
Date: 07/20/19 03:52 am Title: Speed
So far from what I read (up to chapter 3), it's interesting enough to keep me wondering what exactly is going to happen next. However, it depends on how the story develops and if that development feels realistic (i.e placing yourself as the main character and wondering to yourself "would I make that decision myself" or would this specific character make a certain decision and why?). The story feels above average but another reason why I am giving it my rating is that I want other people to read this and give their review of it.
Author's Response: Thank you for your response and review. This is all new to me, as I've never tried writing before. I've read many stories here, and felt compelled to try and make an attempt at creating my own. It's also being written as an outlet for myself, or a distraction for certain things going on in my personal life. I apologize this story will updated at a slower pace. I've been struggling with the aforementioned personal issues, that are preventing me from writing this story. You know, Demons in the head, type stuff. I've got another update, I'm hoping to upload soon. But I'll be honest, I'm on my third rewrite of the next part, as I am having a hard time figuring out where this story is going. I really appreciate your honesty, and have reflected on your advice. Taking your advice into consideration, as well as me being a new writer (can you even label yourself a writer if you suck at it? lol), I've decided to adjust a few things about this story. Nothing too major, just decided the plot needs to be more realistic, grounded, and simpler. Moving forward, I'll be pulling a lot of inspiration from my own personal life instead, as I would like this story to be more of a slice of life style, with a bit of psychological and horror elements mixed in. Other bits could change as well as I go along, or if others would like to weigh in their opinions. Please any advice is greatly appreciated as I have no clue what I am doing. This is still a bit of a concept story, created as I go along, though I've got more of structure or skeleton for the story to follow now. Biggest element, and continuing theme so far will be the main character, Shawn, and his struggle with depression, existentialism, misanthropy, and just trying to rediscover his place in life. Thank you again for your review, it means a lot, as I never expect anyone to even find this story, let alone even review it.