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Reviewer: Kathryn Mayhew Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/15/19 11:24 pm Title: Awaken in a world gone mad.

Hi Rayven! I like the story so far - it definitely has some possibilities. I'd love to see more when you're ready!

Reviewer: Sajingu Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/20/19 03:52 am Title: Speed.

So far from what I read (up to chapter 3), it's interesting enough to keep me wondering what exactly is going to happen next. However, it depends on how the story develops and if that development feels realistic (i.e placing yourself as the main character and wondering to yourself "would I make that decision myself" or would this specific character make a certain decision and why?). The story feels above average but another reason why I am giving it my rating is that I want other people to read this and give their review of it.

Author's Response: Thank you for your response and review. This is all new to me, as I've never tried writing before. I've read many stories here, and felt compelled to try and make an attempt at creating my own. It's also being written as an outlet for myself, or a distraction for certain things going on in my personal life. I apologize this story will updated at a slower pace. I've been struggling with the aforementioned personal issues, that are preventing me from writing this story. You know, Demons in the head, type stuff. I've got another update, I'm hoping to upload soon. But I'll be honest, I'm on my third rewrite of the next part, as I am having a hard time figuring out where this story is going. I really appreciate your honesty, and have reflected on your advice. Taking your advice into consideration, as well as me being a new writer (can you even label yourself a writer if you suck at it? lol), I've decided to adjust a few things about this story. Nothing too major, just decided the plot needs to be more realistic, grounded, and simpler. Moving forward, I'll be pulling a lot of inspiration from my own personal life instead, as I would like this story to be more of a slice of life style, with a bit of psychological and horror elements mixed in. Other bits could change as well as I go along, or if others would like to weigh in their opinions. Please any advice is greatly appreciated as I have no clue what I am doing. This is still a bit of a concept story, created as I go along, though I've got more of structure or skeleton for the story to follow now. Biggest element, and continuing theme so far will be the main character, Shawn, and his struggle with depression, existentialism, misanthropy, and just trying to rediscover his place in life. Thank you again for your review, it means a lot, as I never expect anyone to even find this story, let alone even review it.

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