Reviews For Belladonna Beach
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Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/31/19 03:23 am Title: Chapter 1

Well done! Thanks for this short story. Sure it could be expanded, but it's fine how it is too. And I agree with your previous response, as I see it, what's the point of any body morph or swap if the protagonist ends up amnesiac about their past? It's the transition and novelty of the experience that I find entertaining. Even if a short story like this one doesn't try to address, "OK how does this work out in the rest of their lives?"

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Yeah seeing the aftermath of how the character deals with the change is always interesting, especially if it's a slower change that they have to learn to deal with over a longer period of time. I haven't really included those in either of the stories I've published, but I have a few stories like that that never got finished. I hope to include some of those themes in the project I'm working on intermittently now though.

Reviewer: Amanda R Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/19/19 02:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really neat scene. Think you could easily make this into a longer full story if you slowed down the change a bit and did it as he slowly kept going into the water after failing to fight the waves or whatever and getting returned to shore more feminine each time. Unless of course the plan was for this just to be the start of the story. Either way, really nice to see more from you. Quite liked your other story, and I hope this means you're going to be writing some more in the future!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yeah that's a good idea for a direction the scene could have gone. I didn't really intend for this to be that intricate of a scene, originally made it a faster transformation that didn't leave time for mind alterations to occur, but I do have some other story prompts for the same setting that could evolve into longer, more detailed transformations through different means and from different POVs if I get around to writing those. Either way, I should be posting more on here in the future. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/19/19 04:07 am Title: Chapter 1

Nice description of his change. I'm surprised she could still say her name was Patrick after the magical sex change. Can't wait to read your other story. Thanks for writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yeah, I didn't really want to do a complete mind wipe even if the story didn't really continue beyond that point. Unless it's done for a specific reason or done really well, I'm always a little disappointed in stories when a character completely loses track of who they are. On another note, I hope you enjoy my other story if you get the chance to read it. I'm actually writing a sequel to it, but it will be a while before it comes out since I just started.

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