Reviews For Wand in Hand
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Reviewer: Jemma Johnson Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/14/19 09:16 am Title: Wand in Hand

Emotionally complex yet delightfully wholesome! I loved this origin story of Daisy and hopefully we’ll get to follow her and her friends on further adventures!

Reviewer: Trismegistus Shandy Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/31/19 10:54 pm Title: Wand in Hand

That was heartwarming and exciting in the right proportions. I love how Daisy's mom is so completely unimpressed with Potato Bun's bullshit.

I can't give it five stars because of the number of grammar and puctuation issues, though. Study up on how to format dialogue in prose fiction, and try to use fewer and more well-chosen sentence fragments. When you see a setence fragment in a professsionally published book, think about what *kind* of sentence fragment it is -- noun phrase, prepositional phrase, dependent clause of some sort? -- and why it's being used that way.

If you'd like help proofreading your work, let me know via the "Contact" button on my author page. (Assuming that feature still works with all the problems the site's having lately...)

I look forward to reading more of your work.

Reviewer: Diana Ookawa Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 08:18 pm Title: Wand in Hand

Omg, so cute, especially the ending!

Reviewer: Firebate Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 03:33 pm Title: Wand in Hand

Fantastic Story!

Reviewer: Lilchelly Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 05:02 am Title: Wand in Hand

D'awwwwe this was cute

Reviewer: Cassie Sandwich Signed Report
Date: 07/12/19 04:34 am Title: Wand in Hand

I still love the pride flag costumes. Absolutely adorable~

Reviewer: Easy Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 03:20 am Title: Wand in Hand

That was fun !!!
More, please.

Reviewer: Sunset Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 03:39 am Title: Wand in Hand

Ahhhhh this story is so, so cute. Can I be Daisy?

Reviewer: Roadbandit Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/12/19 01:41 am Title: Wand in Hand

Excellent storyline,very very cute!

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