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Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed Report
Date: 07/22/19 02:13 am Title: The beginning

Hmm so many opportunities missed I think? It would be much more fun to my mind to see the two boys struggle to keep their virginity as sexy girls all season, slowly starting to love being girls or maybe not but being tricked? Also the change of their bodies was described but with no feelings from the boys, fear, pain, pleasure, hated, jealousy, panic, curiousity? Keep trying to imagine being inside your character s heads and your writing will get better

Reviewer: Lethaldaza Signed star Report
Date: 07/13/19 10:03 am Title: Adjusting to being a woman

need improvement

Reviewer: okieohio Signed star Report
Date: 07/13/19 01:21 am Title: Adjusting to being a woman

The story has potential but the writing is written in a matter of fact way. There is not resistance and questioning of why it is happening. The MCs don't give an indication of what they are undergoing.

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