Date: 01/01/20 10:23 pm Title: Forty Seven: Public Transport
Flirting like hell with Jeremy, that could be a huuuuge mistake. That poor boy... nothing is going to come out of his advances. Krystie has only one thing on her mind, getting back to her family that she cheated on
Date: 11/06/19 07:46 pm Title: Forty Three: A man inside the woman.
For some strange reason I get the feeling you should add a BDSM tag.
Anyway, I like the story, although there are some very long chapters and some proofreading would help lots with the reading experience.
Author's Response: Of course Sthelen quite right, I forgot, tag added. Thanks for your comments, and yes, I agree with you but I'm desperate to finish.
Date: 10/16/19 11:59 pm Title: Forty one: an Engagement
The Orgasmatron I think, was also in a 1970's Woody Allen movie. I think the movie was called Sleeper.
Author's Response: Oh yes, mike34912 you are right, you have just reminded me. Without any research, I vaguely remember him being a beauty queen among other things, another classic sci-fi. Thanks, Kitty
Date: 10/09/19 03:27 pm Title: Forty one: an Engagement
Interesting chapter. Awaiting what will happen to Chris.
PS, I forgot about the passenger!
Author's Response: I have just uploaded chapter 42, surprisingly the same number relates to Douglas Adams, 'Hitchhikers guide to the universe', in which 42 is given as the answer to life, the universe and everything. Is 42 Chris's answer, or is a better computer needed, as in Douglas's story?
Date: 10/08/19 09:51 pm Title: Forty one: an Engagement
Quite the ride, thanks! Wish our "hero-ine" could at least observed via Electra interface;-)
Author's Response: Thanks, Lailaluvs00 I'm glad you liked it. As for Chris, yes for the chapter I do agree he could have observed. However, for the overall story, an unconscious Chris is necessary...hum...on second thoughts too much of a drift from the protagonist?...not sure, perhaps I leave it for now.
Date: 09/29/19 09:36 pm Title: Forty: Chris and Miranda
I knew that Krystie would not go away.
I'm just glad that it seems like it was mutiny and not all of the crew that did it.
Author's Response: Mutiny, hum, Ok Florence, but was she blinded by the presence of Miranda's abilities? And is a passenger part of a crew?
Date: 09/01/19 06:27 pm Title: Thirty Six: Sunday Morning Breakfast
How can this story possibly have a happy ending?
Author's Response: Doubt...Dismissal...Unfortunate...a challenge to rise? The happy ending is in place, although not in a format worthy of other stories. As with O2b XX comment regarding Authors their first story, surprisingly common amongst authors. The character Chris, like the author...the story has to be finished. The issue, like us all unfortunately TIME!
Date: 08/26/19 02:54 am Title: One: Chris
The story and plot can be considered pretty Good but there is a hella lot of sentences.
Please add spaces, it was really hard to read.
Author's Response: I do go on a bit, someone else has said this, liking me to an old woman...Hum, yes, well...less of the old! As Helena would say, there's room for improvement! Seriously, taken on board, Thanks.
Date: 08/17/19 02:44 pm Title: Thirty Three: Saturday evening
Note for next time l, it's hard to keep all those A names straight especially between updates.
Author's Response: Thanks, good comment, I'd missed that one. Alison, Amelia, and Alysia three totally different Characters. Yes, I agree, although a bit late now, I'll be more careful next time!
Date: 07/23/19 05:51 am Title: One: Chris
The problem in changing back for most of these scifi type changes is usually the mass. Normal the person loses mass become a girl. That can be explained usually. But where does bgg these mass come from to go back?
Author's Response: Oh, good question, Where did it go in the first place, Miranda is good, so is the 'Sippeoc' But, there is an answer later.
Date: 07/13/19 01:14 am Title: Three: Florence and Alison
Ah, yes, I remember this story. You wrote it before but you have changed it and added to it it seems.
Author's Response: I'm pleased you remember it, yes your right, hopefully, my additions aren't too distracting and I haven't got too carried away.