Date: 10/23/19 04:44 am Title: Chapter 3: Waking up
This is really shaping up to be a great story. Too bad Claire didn't make more wishes that her father would have to deal with. Imagine if she had wished to be more curvy, or that her boyfriend would go all the way with her, or that she was old enough to run away and get married after the incident with her dad and boyfriend.
That said, the chapter seemed a little rushed. It would have been nice to read more about him waking up in her body and her in his. It also seemed like dad was sort of expecting the swap. He didn't react very strongly when he saw all the hair. Dad also seemed to have woken up fully dressed, but never said anything about it until it was time to change. Maybe you could take a little more time to describe the characters, their surroundings, and their feelings.
I wonder how long it will take for both of them to figure out all of Claire's wishes? A few things were said in passing without Claire realizing she had used the 'W' word.
Please don't take anything I said as negative. I think you have great potential as a writer and I'm really looking forward to reading the rest of this story and all of your future stories. Thank you.
Date: 10/22/19 04:26 am Title: Chapter 2: The Party
Wow, Claire made a lot of wishes without realizing it. So by tomorrow I expect:
Dad and Claire will have swapped bodies, so they can understand each other better, and walk in each other's shoes.
Claire's body, with dad inside can only wear the girliest of clothes.
And pink nail polish.
Dad in Claire's body will have to: listen to Claire in Dad's body, do whatever 'she' is told, and no swearing.
And be more agreeable. That one should work just great with Claire's jerk of a boyfriend. She will be putty in his, um, hands.
Now we don't know if there is a limit on the number of wishes, or a time limit, or if they can be reversed. Do they have to understand each other better before they can switch back?
I can't wait to read the next chapter in this story. You're doing a great job with the story line, the pacing, the descriptions. I feel like I am right there watching all this unfold. Thank you.
Date: 09/22/19 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great start to your story. I feel bad for dad, he didn't do anything intentionally wrong. Plus he sort of redeemed himself with chivalry and kindness towards the old lady. Can't wait to see what Claire wishes for, and whether it will be during a period of calm rational thought, or during some emotional outburst. Either way, they don't know it is magic, so the results will be..... Interesting. Thanks for taking the time to write this story.
Date: 07/07/19 11:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm super excited about the tags for this story. Nice gut or bad guy I always love it when someone falls accidentally into a situation they didn't plan on and it gets out of control, especially when sex and TG is involved. I can't wait for this guy to accidentally/be forced to become a girl and have his new pussy stuffed and be forced to live his new life.
Date: 07/02/19 02:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice setup for this tale. Although I relish reading stories where some lout is transformed/body swapped against his will and put through the ringer, it is tough to know that the hammer is going to fall on a nice guy like the protagonist seems to be. That I care enough about the characters to already anticipate the next chapter should be considered praiseworthy. Well done!