Date: 06/23/20 10:07 am Title: Wake Me Up When September Ends
Honestly I hope this egg comes to terms with herself eventually. Also I really hope the school doesn't forcibly pry her away from Lilac, it would only make her hate the school more and delay her eventual hatching, also I think Lilac and Damon really have the potential to be the caring, nurturing and grounding force she really needs.
Date: 06/22/20 09:35 pm Title: Wake Me Up When September Ends
The cliff hanger wasn't unexpected. But I like you using the modern approach the school would use. Unfortunately Baylee can't hide. The boy next door will probably be knocking soon.
But I can see Lilac officially adopting her, but after the school and the corporation tries to figure out why she is resisting so much. Maybe Baylee can go to a public school.
The writing is as good as it has been in the past. The question is what happened to Blake's investment, social security quarters, his 401 K or IRA, and if course his car . It seems the school just stole all of that.
Date: 06/22/20 05:22 pm Title: Wake Me Up When September Ends
Oooooh that plot twist! Awwww besides Lilac constantly teasing her they seem like they'd make good parents, though parents love to tease you sometimes so Lilac just preparing for her role. Uh oh though, new waters not gonna go down that easy. Maybe an arrangement can be worked out
Date: 06/22/20 04:20 pm Title: Wake Me Up When September Ends
I always look forward to seeing updates to this story, and I want to say you have created an engaging universe with story and characters. Obviously in the real world none of this would happen, and that’s ok. It’s a story, and the rules work within this set universe.
The twists and turns are great, and I care what happens to the characters. I’m really looking forward to the next update.
Date: 06/22/20 03:28 pm Title: Orientation
There are many stories on transgender fiction sites that to me are ridiculous, disgusting or just plain lame, in part because they don’t conform to the themes I’m interested in. But I also realize that those same stories are meaningful, encouraging or entertaining to many who read them. So rather than complaining, I just look for other stories that I’m comfortable with. When I find a story that I don’t like in some way, I try to get over myself and realize that the writer didn’t write simply for my pleasure, nor should she or he feel required to do so. So, here's a great big thank you to Heyyayyay for writing this story.
Date: 06/22/20 03:14 pm Title: Orientation
If this were real life, and someone went about changing the sex of people without asking, then I also would have a problem with it, But I have no problem with Baylee becoming a girl against her will in this story. The process of her coming to appreciate the change is one of the things that makes this kind of story entertaining. This is, after all, fantasy. I find myself wishing I could be in Baylee’s place, but alas, that’s not possible. I’m grateful for such a good writer who expertly fashions a story through which one can live out their dreams vicariously.
Author's Response: "expertly fashions a story" is a heavyweight compliment! I don't know if I can wear that badge, just yet. But I'm flattered, but more importantly, I'm glad you're liking my work. :)
Date: 06/22/20 01:07 pm Title: Orientation
This really feels like a horror story. The main character has been changed against their will and is increasingly trapped with everyone against them. Even if they were secretly trans before all this they're being treated like a toy and it's horrible. The shear hypocrisy of the trans guy being complicit in putting them in a body they're not comfortable in is horrible. The couple are treating it like a joke rather than a serious crime. There is no identity death tag and yet their mind is clearly being altered drastically. The fact that they seem to be slowly accepting at least parts of this just makes me feel sick when they've been manipulated so heavily.
Date: 06/16/20 10:29 am Title: Lab Partner
After re-reading the chapter the reference to Zach is clearer to me. It does seem that Baylee hiding the vial would be hard not to notice in a well lite room if stuffed in her pants. I do hope Baylee holds off of trying to change Damon so it is not obvious she was responsible. Mainly I hope she doesn't change Damon so the interaction of the three is explored.
The after dinner time back at the apartment might be interesting. A lot of people likes to relax just in their underwear at home. It seems Lilac is comfortable with Baylee undressed and is having a bit of fun bossing Baykee around. So after dinner Baykee ending up in a long t-shirt and panties or even a babydoll doesn't seem out of place while the 3 watches TV before bed. Damon might falsely suggest he will try to help to quell Baykee's anger.
Please keep up the writing the story possible twists is exciting to speculate on. The story is very enjoyable.
Date: 06/12/20 03:17 pm Title: Lab Partner
The direction this story has gone is surprising, but I dig it. I was expecting a slice of life story about being trapped in school, but it's actually SO much more and has a great wide world outside of New Waters.
Also, It's so funny that Lilac just matter-of-factly accepts all this stuff due to being a fan of TG fiction (and knowing about her boyfriends work, I suppose). In summary, I love Lilac. Her and Baylee's dynamic is delightfully awkward and so familiar.
And I'm unsure if this is conincidental or if maybe we've enjoyed similar media in the past, but this story reminds me of little parts of anime and manga I've liked in the past, so it's really great to see aspects of those (Re:Life comes to mind) incorporated into this.
That's enough from me; thanks again for writing.
Date: 06/08/20 04:48 pm Title: Orientation
This story has certainly taken an interesting turn. It leaves one wondering what the future holds for Damon. Maybe she (Damon) becomes a new student at New Waters where she and Baylee become friends? Or, perhaps Baylee will get caught trying to drug Damon, and Lilac will drag her back to New-Waters and deliver her into the clutches of Ms. Ansvi. Oh, the possibilities!
You certainly have a talent for grabbing the reader's attention in a way that, for me, is irresistible. Thank you for posting this so quickly after the previous chapter. I can hardly wait for the next.
Date: 06/08/20 01:28 pm Title: Lab Partner
Really like this chapter. I can see Baylee trying to use the vial on Damon. But with the jeggings being so tight I can't see how Damon or Lilac cannot see the bulge. It would have been nice to havecread where the jeggings separated Baylee's cheeks and at keast Damon notice how nice she looks from behind. I wonder whatcwould happen if the vial broke and got on Baylee's skin? Would it make her more feminine or make her die? So far Baylee's anger has over come her new raging hormones.
One possible typo. Lilac in the beginning of the chapter called Blake Zack.
Author's Response: Thanks for your input! That was actually not a typo. Baylee is at the mirror, envisioning herself having a conversation with a guy who isn't actually there. (Which may also help satisfy your need to hear more from Baylee's hormones!) But I've now changed the wording a bit to make that clearer. It was a bit confusing the way I had it.
Date: 06/08/20 08:31 am Title: Lab Partner
I mean, if you want to end up homeless this is a good idea. Yeah... jeez this girl is HEAVILY closeted, like did her dad beat the hell out of her for feminine tendancies or something? I'm starting to think there may be something even more sinister in there.
Baylee... use your head, this is a TERRIBLE idea. I get the feeling Damon expected this though, why would they have their super secret formulas just lying around
Date: 06/03/20 07:26 am Title: Maslow's Hierarchy
Lilac is surprisingly accepting of this situation. I think this might have happened to someoen else she knew before. Maybe one of her gal pals became a guy pal or vice versa. Weird, also wow that's a lot of signs. What's next you gonna have Baylee have chokers and eat pickles and like catgirls xD
Date: 05/30/20 02:16 pm Title: Maslow's Hierarchy
Very good chapter. I like it. Like to read the next one.
There is one typo. Lilac meeting Blake in the park called him Baylee and Blake didn't respond. Either that is a posdible typo or something is a bit fishy with Lilac.
Author's Response: I hate to kill the mystery about Lilac, but that was totally a typo! Thanks. It's been corrected.
Date: 05/17/20 10:43 am Title: Home Economics
As always your characterizations of, well, characters is phenomenal. Darcy and Cole's dialogue is a treat to read. The personality you manage to put into your writing is really admirable.
Thanks for continuing your story.
p.s. I can't wait to meet Lilac someday. I barely know anything about her and I'm already intrigued!
Date: 05/14/20 08:56 am Title: Home Economics
I'm so glad you're back and okay! This is literally a terrible idea Baylee. Like... this is a phenomenally stupid idea. What do you think is going to happen if your roommates catch you? Though I'm not sure what else you can do. Turning back with a medicine that doesn't exist according to most people would be a REALLY tough experience. I don't think our protag is gonna find it so easily. Also... oh God they changed his sexuality too. Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeelp
Date: 03/07/20 09:33 pm Title: Orientation
This story is one of the more captivating ones I've read in TG fiction. Apparently other readers feel similarly about your work. We haven't forgotten you... I hope you haven't forgotten us. Looking forward to more chapters.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. Just started working on it again. Hoping to have another chapter in a few days.
Date: 01/23/20 09:55 pm Title: Orientation
Just read all 9 chapters in one go. Love the story line. Your writing is really great. Easy to read and drew me in. The interaction between the girls is really fantastic. It read very genuine to me. Looking forward to more. Thank you.
Date: 01/05/20 06:12 am Title: Social Studies
Wow at the potion lady being nonchalant about Bailey's transformation. She clearly knows this is a thing that goes on, and might know more than she's letting on. Bailey might have just missed her opportunity but she doesn't seem keen on talking so who knows. Also jeez the girls are really grilling her hard. Isn't it bad enough what happened to Bailey, now to tease for literally everything, I mean it' a complete reality shift. I'm guessing since she was straight as a guy she's straight as a girl now? So if she was gay as a guy she'd be a lesbian? Interesting thoughts on that
Date: 01/04/20 03:21 pm Title: Orientation
Wow! I was excited when I saw that you’d posted another chapter. And, doubly so when I found your unique approach to Baylee’s resistance and refusal to introspection and acceptance. I found none of the tired clichés commonly used by many other TG writers. How refreshing.
You should be on Patreon.
Date: 12/19/19 10:03 pm Title: Orientation
On the basis of this one story, you’ve become one of my three favorite authors in the entire TG Fiction genre. You writing style is excellent but better still, the plot in this story pushes all the right buttons for me.
So, it’s been two weeks since you posted chapter 8 and I’m already beginning to experience the pain of withdrawal. Accordingly, I started at chapter 1 and I’ve read through chapter 8 again (like, maybe for the 7th time?). This story gets better every time I read through it. But every time I read it, I get increasingly hungry for more.
Hey, no pressure, though. Good writing happens when it is ready—not before. I’ll just read it again in between episodes of googling for how to land a sales job with Scholar Supply Co.
I can only hope!!
Date: 12/14/19 02:29 am Title: History
Is the school only going after people who don't mind the change? Like people who are either hate their life so much they don't mind going to this school or people who wouldn't miss it? Hell are there any trans girls in the school I wonder? I'm very curious about the prospect of how this works
Date: 12/07/19 03:44 pm Title: Orientation
In Terrigen’s comment it was noted that they(the school) has good intentions. But that doesn’t mean what they are doing is right. Probably because they change people without their permission.
So, I wonder if they’d be interested in volunteers? Of course that wouldn't make for a very cool story. But it would be great for the volunteers.
Author's Response: I think since the school tries to keep quiet about the transformations, it wouldn't be their style to advertise for volunteers, or to openly ask people permission ahead of time. But they most likely have "enrolled" quite a few people who would have volunteered if asked.
Date: 12/06/19 04:37 am Title: Orientation
I'm glad to see an update!
If this school is real, please let me know the address, I need a reset.
Author's Response: If only it were! I envisioned the location as a fictitious city in the Northeastern United States, but I actually did read the website of an girls' school in Toronto Canada before writing the story, which helped give me some ideas.
Date: 12/05/19 08:29 pm Title: History
Always glad to see an update to this story. I’m invested.
Cole does have a point, but I also see where Bayley is coming. The school isn’t just grabbing anyone off of the street, they have good intentions. But that doesn’t mean what they are doing is right.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Date: 11/27/19 06:05 pm Title: Orientation
I was hoping you’d post something further for the holiday, but sadly, nothing yet. Oh well, this story is so nice that I am more than willing to wait until your creativity ripens another chapter. You are a gifted writer, and this story is one of the really good ones IMO. Thank you.
Author's Response: Thanks for your interest! I'm pleased to say I'm almost done with the new chapter! It's longer than the others. Would have finished it off tonight but I drank a little too much and I can't seem to write well when I'm this buzzed. Quality before speediness! Should be up by end of tomorrow! :D
Date: 11/14/19 03:46 am Title: Orientation
Every trip out of her room, interacting with other students, causes Baylee to come to grips with the realities of her new life. Can't wait till she starts weighing the qualities of that new life against the humdrum, dead-end life of a school supplies salesman.
Date: 11/13/19 12:42 am Title: Fluid Dynamics
I binge read it all just now. Really finding this story funny with the surreal antics of the staff.
Expecting to read more chapters in the future.
Although I say funny but in the actual position of Blake, it would be terrifying, hopefully they really only have his "her" best interests in mind. And also that Baylee now finds herself at home.
Date: 11/08/19 03:00 pm Title: Orientation
This is really a great story. It has the potential of becoming one of my all time favorite TG stories. Discovering that you posted a new chapter was almost like winning the lottery—not that I’d know how that feels. :(
Author's Response: Thank you too! It means a lot to know my story is so likeable. In the beginning I had a silly short story in mind, but I dare say it's become something much more wholesome than I expected. I could totally see carrying this out into a full sized novel. I just hope I don't let it go to my head and let the quality suffer. The hardest part of keeping a good thing going is not really knowing what makes it so good to begin with.
Date: 11/06/19 02:17 pm Title: Orientation
As to the comment regarding Blake/Baylee being a Freshman with no family; the paddling applied by Mrs. Ansvi was stern but not harsh--the kind of punishment a mother might use. Could it be that Baylee will wind up getting from Mrs. Ansvi, the mothering he obviously needs?
Date: 08/29/19 08:44 pm Title: Initiation
Yeah I'm curious about family too, a highschool student, a FRESHMAN without a family? That'd be just sad... is his IRL family gonna be involved also... was the principal right? Like... he seems to really be looking forward to this and having a good experience. I know I'd not like it because I love my honey but if I wasn't with my hunnie a chance to go through a not trash highschool that everyone hates me and makes fun of me for being "effiminate" and going through middleschool; and elementary school being beat up all the time wasn't fun...
People tell me how fun highschool was and I just... think they are lying? Because school was HELL, I mean I'm a trans girl so that's probably why but... UGH it was a nightmare! Also how in the world is the school going to hide the fact a man went to their school, then suddenly disappeared after driving to that school? I mean I know it's easy to hide but how are they gonna stop the police from showing up and asking where he was? Unless no one cares about him I'm guessing.
Date: 08/23/19 02:38 pm Title: Physical Education
"if Mrs Ansvi thought he was going to blindly go along with this, she'd better think again."
Heh, so oblivious. I'm sure he has no idea what website his story has been published on...
Keep up the good work, looking forward to the next installment!
Date: 08/23/19 02:27 pm Title: Physical Education
"UNGRATEFUL!?! RUDE!?!! Fuck you, Rachel!"
Fitting right in as a teenage girl, I see.
I have one, I know.
Author's Response: This comment brought a smile to my face. I haven't had much interaction with teen girls in awhile (I'm 28 now), so I wasn't even really trying to make Blake act like a teen girl, but now it occurs to me that he was, which works perfectly! :D
Date: 08/23/19 02:25 pm Title: Physical Education
"Aww, come here, you," Mrs Ansvi hugged him. He hugged her back. It was weird but also comforting. He hadn't hugged anyone in ages. And certainly nobody had hugged him in ages."
Hugging, an often-overlooked component of erotica. Also aftercare, another frequently-overlooked component of erotica. First you tell your sub what she did wrong, then you spank her, then you hug her and let her know you love her.
Very nice. You've done your homework. I'm impressed. I was especially impressed by "... certainly nobody had hugged him in ages." It's the bottom-of-the-ninth-home-run of sexuality. Simple loving physical comfort with no demands... Victory.
Date: 08/23/19 02:17 pm Title: Physical Education
"Mrs. Ansvi held his upper body down with one hand and whacked him hard on his naked bottom with the other hand."
Fan service. Thanks!
I feel like Baylee is going to need a lot more spankings before she is fully-acclimatized to her new identity.
Date: 07/17/19 06:32 am Title: Physical Education
Well then... that's unexpected. Please tell me at least SOME of those "male" students were trans or something. Like you could help sooo many Trans girls with this. It'd be like a dream come true and you wouldn't have to worry about someone fighting you tooth and nail.
Author's Response: I'd like to think a number of the "men turned girl" students were actually trans women in denial before the school took them in, seeing as how the principal explains that most of them eventually appreciate it, and given how she tends to select young men who seem unhappy in life. Also it's possible some of the "women turned girl" students and traditionally enrolled girls were openly living as trans females before the school turned them into cisgender girls and took them in, probably to their great satisfaction. But I'm also going to acknowledge that a portion of the students had no desire whatsoever to be turned into schoolgirls, because life's not fair and the school doesn't always hand pick the right people. Oops!
Date: 07/04/19 11:31 am Title: Enrollment
This story is funny and weird, I'm enjoying it a lot. The staff are all so overbearing, I was almost expecting him to get a spanking or something for not having his hall pass. I guess that will have to wait until after they turn him into a girl (which I assume is coming up).
Are going to go for a sudden change, or a gradual, unnoticed change as he makes his/her way through her class schedule? I don't know how you have this planned out, but I thought it would be fun and interesting if he slowly ended up female and in uniform bit by bit by the end of the day. "Oh, I spilled coffee on your jacket, I'm so sorry, Sweetie. Here, just wear this one so you'll be ready for your next class." "Oh, Honey, those shoes are really much too big, here, wear these."
Anyway, good start, interesting premise, I'm looking forward to seeing where you're going with this.
Date: 07/03/19 01:12 am Title: Enrollment
It's interesting so far. The principal seems awfully enthusiastic, so you may want to go into a bit of detail as to exactly why she is in a later chapter.
It has a slow build-up, but that's fine. Slow is good because it's more satisfying to read.