Date: 06/11/19 05:41 am Title: Chapter 7
Overall felt a bit hurried, but the brisk narrative pace *was* refreshing with how it sketched out the broad strokes of the story. I particularly liked the worldbuilding, actually, and definitely appreciated how it was subtly woven in without being intrusive!
Date: 06/08/19 09:13 am Title: Chapter 1
Just enough detail! without dragging the pace of the story down you've down a wonderful job of establishing the stakes and setting. Also the small character detail of stealing the bottles was enough to make me laugh, which is rare for a lot of the writing on here. Great work, I'm excited to read more already!
Date: 06/07/19 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really good, but a downer of an ending when it came to Julie. She was by his side the whole time, then after his change they drifted apart. When she changed, she would have been the same person. It’s very bittersweet and sad, they couldn’t continue to be friends.
Author's Response: Youíre right, it is bittersweet. The person I based Julie on is somebody I was very close to, best friends between 2002 and 2006. Iíve seen her half a dozen times since then, but we drifted apart. Thankfully, new people have come into my life as well. The truth of the matter is, it doesnít take a magical gender transformation to change who you are, and even if you stay the same (or think you are), everyone else is growing and changing too.
Date: 06/07/19 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
While short, this story was wonderful in it's convictions and perfect in it's emotional tone. I hadn't noticed the author line at first and thouroughly enjoyed this, then noticed it was you and knew why. Glad to get more from you, even if it isn't Chimera.
Author's Response: Thank you! I feel bad that I left that story half told, but Iím working on finishing. Basically, I had written the entire story, but as I posted one chapter at a time, my edits turned into rewrites, and it pulled the story so far away that the original ending no longer fit. And then I was hit with a major depressive episode that left me a little unmotivated to write. Iíve been starting to interact with the world again, one dropped thread at a time, and now Iím ready to pick up this one.