Date: 03/06/20 02:24 am Title: Chapter 34: Tight Blue Leather Bodysuit
This chapter was so great! The quip about the lasgun eyes made me smile, as did the comparison to Scooby Doo. The fact that the dad seems to have made some friends does worry me though. Keep up the good work, and goddess bless you.
Date: 03/05/20 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
You know something I love about your stories? The conflict. Its paced extremly well. Its beyond believable. It isnt oversaturated. It is an extremely delicate spice in stories that I believe you handle amazingly well!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's actually... gosh, I really try xD. Thank you.
Date: 01/14/20 06:46 am Title: Chapter 32: An Extra Pair
This is the single most impactful and wonderful chapter from the extraordinary number of stories I have read. I love this chapter so much it hurts and I honestly hope to one day encounter my own Brook. Also again Brook in a suit must absolutely happen!
Date: 01/01/20 06:27 am Title: Chapter 32: An Extra Pair
Wow! Just... wow. This chapter had me grinning like crazy the entire time I was reading it. It was the perfect mixture of cute, hot, emotional and wholesome. I wish I could rate this chapter higher than 5 stars!
Date: 12/31/19 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 32: An Extra Pair
As a "Disciple of Brook" on Patreon, I am very much okay with this.
Fun fact, by the way: fainting goats actually go rigid, not limp. And I now have a mental image of Elsie freezing in place and slowly, ever so slowly, tipping over.
Date: 12/31/19 05:06 am Title: Chapter 31: Purple Handbag
Tongue in cheek I must ask, why can't Elsie's powers help her with falling... in love? (grin)
And thanks for the lengthy author notes. Presumably you have identified your girlfriend now (easy enough to find Songbird's author's pseudonym) as someone who doesn't mind being teasingly and lovingly called "dumdum" (grin again).
Your writing is top-notch. This story has grown a lot of chapters, but I'm enjoying the self-exploratory pace, and the various plot developments.
Date: 12/30/19 07:49 am Title: Chapter 30: Sleeveless Hoodie
This was a very sweet chapter, although the plans by her family to “fix her” sounds ominous. It always baffles me how hardcore religious people often seem to get their own doctrine wrong. For example, the section in Leviticus that says it is an abomination for a man to lie with another man is actually a mistranslation; the passage more accurately translates to “ a man shall not lie with a going boy” (also, if you want to be literal, the passage says nothing about women laying with women, nor anything at all about trans people).
Date: 12/29/19 11:52 am Title: Chapter 30: Sleeveless Hoodie
Well, that was a surprise to get to break at work on. An update. That was quick X3
*looks forward to the rush of fluffy feels incoming*
Now if Elsie and Brook could just kiss 'for real' XD
Super looking forward to the next few chapters for sure.
Mmm, future wonder... Will Elsie take up hero work? Mmmm
And if so, what will be her hero name XD
Date: 12/29/19 03:54 am Title: Chapter 29: Rainbow Thigh Highs
... I was starting to get worried it was some sort of mind plot on Maddy. To be honest, I hate those. It twists me into knots in a way I do not enjoy reading. What actually happened is both sadder between her and Elsie and better over all I think.
Over all? I’m loving this story. A lot of good elements and some big build up. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hard same on the mind plot thing. Hate it to death, and I actually banned mind control as a power for either heroes or villains within the Kammiverse because it's kinda awful.
Date: 12/29/19 03:35 am Title: Chapter 29: Rainbow Thigh Highs
Yay! It always makes my day when you post more of this story, and boy was there a lot to unpack in this chapter. I will say in Maddie’s defense, given the choice between going on a date and learning magic, I would pick learning magic every time.
Author's Response: Thank you! (Imagine a heart emoji here, tgst is coded badly). I love getting your reviews~!
Date: 12/28/19 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 28: Trucker Cap
Yay I'm so glad Elsie is back. I love this story so much really. I love that Elsie is some super hero but is just an adorable lovable girl trying her best to make her way through life in a world that can be truly terrible to anyone different, especially a trans emerged lesbian girl. But then we get our taste of the super hero stuff from her mom. So much goodness all around.
And then there's Brook who is proving just how stupidly awesome she is. All I can say is that her in a suit walking with Elsie in a dress is something that so needs to happen, women in suits are sexy asbheck and Elsie would be such a puddle on the floor over it.
Author's Response: Oh it totally needs to happen! The thought of girls in suits makes me into a puddle too!
Date: 12/05/19 10:16 am Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
This story is something special, just like the rest of Vale's stories. How could they all be special, you ask? Well, they're all special in completely different ways. They do share some similarities... in that they all have freaking *amazing* characters, character arcs, etc...
Now, what's special about Falling Over, you ask? Well:
- The portrayal of Elsie's emotional state is seriously amazing
- The way her abilities work is something I've never seen before — like seriously what it's so freaking cool
- I love the direction the story's going (SPOILERS: it's totally not where I expected it to go and that's a good thing... not every first love is true love like a great many stories portray!)
There's so much good stuff in this story that I want to mention but can't without making this review be like five pages long, so I'm kind of prioritising to keep this review simple like this.
Read Falling Over. You won't regret it.
Date: 12/05/19 09:59 am Title: Chapter 27: White Girl's Comfort Hoodie
Surely you have something better to do than post pointless copies of an aggressive comment on every single story from this author? It's one thing to have a disagreement, but this is just harassment.
Date: 11/26/19 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 11: Big Fluffy Jumper
Wow, nice to see Maddy and Elsie hitting it off. You know they both want it, but they are both afraid of driving the other one away. When they finally cross that hurdle, though, sparks (and clothing) are gonna fly.
Now Maddy's constant blushing/embarrassment and her hair troubles make me think she might also be Emerged; probably the first event. Maybe she was also a guy at one time. Can't wait to find out her back story.
Great job with the story so far, back to reading.
Date: 11/14/19 05:24 am Title: Chapter 27: White Girl's Comfort Hoodie
Oh for craps sake when is she going to realize it's real!?! This is just getting ridiculous, Rosie obviously knows, why doesn't she just set one, or both, of them straight! (Metaphorically speaking of course;-)
Date: 11/14/19 03:46 am Title: Chapter 27: White Girl's Comfort Hoodie
You're in love with her you dumb dumb gah. Also that girl that Maddy was with is our universe transferring lady isnt she? And I see the connection between the magic and the mosy adorable dragon ever.
But I do hope things with Maddy get worked out. It really does seem like there's a reason for everything. Plus the two were adorable together, although seeing her with Brook would be so amazing. Brook though seems kinda like rhe type who'd be willing to share her girlfriend so long as she know they love her as much as she loves them. A Maddy, Elsie, Brook cuddle/snuggle pile would be so cute I'd die.
Date: 11/14/19 02:36 am Title: Chapter 27: White Girl's Comfort Hoodie
So sweet. You are one of the best writers on the site. Also, I am not sure if you intended to do this, but I like that Pallas is a servant of Athena, rather than being Athena herself; in one myth, Athena had a mortal friend named Pallas, however she accidentally killed Pallas while throwing discus with her, and took the name Pallas to honor her dead friend. Goddess bless you.
Date: 11/13/19 03:50 am Title: Chapter 25: Suits
Awww! So wholesome! Every trans-girl deserves a mom as sweet, loving, and supportive as Diana! Seeing that this story has been updated always makes my day brighter. Also, have we met Pallas before, I don’t remember what other stories she appeared in. Goddess bless you!
Author's Response: She's been in this story in the Bronze Helmet chapter, and there was a 4 chapter interlude from her perspective in Songbird
Date: 09/13/19 10:27 am Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
Shit, this was updated yesterday??? As in it's still very much being written??? I'm so used to Fanfic.com or whatever the site is with all their discontinued stories that I was severely saddened when I got to the end and realized there was no more. But this is still going on? Yes? You're still writing? Because I just frickin love this story! Not gonna lie I was very skeptical and hesitant when I initially started reading and stylistically it took me a little bit to get used to it but when I did I very much fell in love with this. And I am so happy its ongoing!
Author's Response: Definitely still writing it :). I tend to take like 1-3 week long breaks but I love writing this story so it will continue for sure.
Date: 09/13/19 04:49 am Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
Wow, I mean, we already knew that her parents were evil, but damn. There is a special place in the next life for parents who disown their children for being different. I know that you mentioned your parents were similar, and I just want to let you know that deserve a Diana and a Maddy in your life, if you don’t have them already. Goddess bless you.
Date: 09/12/19 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 21: Hot Vest
Another adorable and heartwrenching couple of chapters. Maddy and Elise awkwardly arranging their date was the cutest thing since cute.
I wonder if Elsie might have had direct deposit set up for scholarship or grant money; if so, she needs to fix that right away. The paperwork for changing that might take a while, and she doesn't want her parents to end up with next semester's textbook money.
Date: 08/31/19 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 18: Gold Button Coat
First of all, I want to say that this is an adorable story. Maddy and Elsie are adorable, and I look forward to seeing their relationship develop. I liked the cameo by Nightbinder, and obviously the parents are horrible, horrible people. I find it funny how fascists like to talk about the superior race and the Ubermensch and all that, but the moment someone actually superhuman comes along, they break out the torches and pitchforks. They also idolize the ancient people’s of Europe, pretty much all of whom we know from historical evidence to been totally fine with homosexuAlity. I could go on, because I find that topic really interesting, but I am digressing. You are one of my favorite writers on the site, and you have real talent. Goddess bless you.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! Thank you for reading my stuff and reviewing :)
Date: 08/14/19 02:10 pm Title: Chapter 17: Short Flowery Sundress
I'm really enjoying this so far. Elsie and Madeline's interactions are really cute and most of the major characters are complex and well-developed.
I have a few comments and questions:
1. She's running ten minutes late for her first day of school, and worried she'll be late. Then she stops to shop for clothes, which can't take less than twenty minutes and probably longer, but still gets there on time?
2. I'm assuming calling courses "papers" is a New Zealand thing, which makes sense in Elsie's narration and dialogue, but you sometimes do it in dialogue from other characters as well, such as the professor for the Victorian Fashion course. Even if the professor is from New Zealand (and Elsie doesn't commnent on her accent), she would have learned to use American academic terminology when talking to mostly American students by now.
3. There are not many typos, but you occasionally have proper names and brand names in lower case, like "maddy" or "fox news". If you'd like me to proofread future chapters, let me know via one of the Discord servers we're both on, or a PM via this site.
I look forward to seeing where this goes, what's going on with Brook, and how long it will take our adorably oblivious Elsie to figure out Ms. Monahan's superhero identity.
Author's Response: Thank you!! Dunno about number one, I'm not the best at time consistency and stuff in my stories Dx. Yeah I didn't know about that and so I just ran with it. When I go back and do an edit I'll change it. Thank you for pointing it out :D. Yeah there's actually no editing at all in most of my writing. It gets written and then it gets thrown out into the wild lmao. I just try to catch mistakes as I make them. Someone proof reading would be amazing if you're interested!
Date: 08/08/19 11:23 am Title: Chapter 17: Short Flowery Sundress
Yay thanks for the chapter. Augh, I really really hope Brook is ok. Again Brook and Maddy are just such sweet hearts. Awe Maddy, her job is so stereotypically cute for her. I will say thay its really sad that Elsie isnt with Brook is because of how intimidated of Brook she is. Sigh, there's almost too much cuteness and adorableness in this story.
Date: 07/03/19 04:15 am Title: Chapter 16: Dinosaur Pajamas
Thank you Val for being amazing at what you do for us. I wish I could help you somehow as I know the pain of transitioning. It requires lot of financial as well as moral support. But I really wish you achieve your goals and become the person you deserve to be. Thank you so much for your hardwork and dedication. Hugs
Author's Response: *hugs* Thank you so much. It's tough yeah. I lost most of my immediate family after I came out, so I don't really have an IRL support network. It sucks.
Date: 06/29/19 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 4: Tight Denim
You have an excellent talent as a story writer. Made it through the first eight chapters today. Will pick up where I left off tomorrow. Just a whole lot of fun.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really enjoy it, and try to put as much emotion as I possibly can into my writing.
Date: 06/29/19 06:03 pm Title: Chapter 16: Dinosaur Pajamas
Caught that lesbian hint from Ms Monahan when she said “Not too different to my own experiences" after Elise told her story to her, dont know if she has a GF but if not then I hope she finds that lucky someone.
Nice and adorable moments between Elsie and Maddy shared in the bed, it was a very good explosion of cuteness wrap together with adorableness to produce mouth watering results.
Date: 06/29/19 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 16: Dinosaur Pajamas
Hehehe, she didnt catch the little "I recieved a text message from your phone" bit. If that's true then just how many people could there possibly be who could get into her phone? Oh Brook is such a freaking sweetheart, they all are absolute sweetheart's, and they all deserve to be happy. Sometimes I catch myself wanting to pick who is my favorite character and I have to chastise myself since they are all my favorite characters. Thanks for the chapter.
Date: 06/29/19 04:41 pm Title: Chapter 16: Dinosaur Pajamas
How big is that lesbian flag Ms. Monahan has though. Like, HOW big. Also gosh good sweet adorable chapter, I love that Maddy's response to Elsie being trans is just "okay cool thanks for telling me that but you're still just a girl I'm really fucking gay for sooooooo..."
Date: 06/16/19 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 14: Dress Shirt
Honestly, the situation seems eminently salvageable, assuming Elsie can get away with openly supporting homosexuality. She didn't actually reveal anything, since "None of us choose this stuff" applies to everyone.
Because of the way the sentence with "Ugh, I had a boyfriend who played games" was structured, I actually thought Leon was gay for a second. Which was hilarious.
Date: 06/16/19 12:56 pm Title: Chapter 15: Helmet of Bronze
oooohhhh gosh who is really Elsie. Vale...... you are a foxdamn tease in all the term of it and omg flirty maddy is so adorable!! im happy her parent got scared because they deserve it!! Also what are the true power of elsie is it space related or physic related like probably gravity?.....also the ice women, most probably know who she is at this point and that just make you more of a adorable tease but now I need the chapter 16...there too much information and new question, I need answer or this goddess made chapter gonna make me daydream all posibility! exellent chapter Vale :3
Date: 06/16/19 10:27 am Title: Chapter 15: Helmet of Bronze
OMG this chapter was so fun to read, first we had the family drama where Elise left her awful family behind. On the way to maddy's the bus she so happen to be on get practically destroyed, killing everyone but her. And on top of all that she gets caught up in a fight between heroes and villains.
What got me really interested was the mention of Elise being the "key" and something or someone is coming for her. And her powers, HOLY CRAP, is she strong. It looks like she literally stop the equivalent of a nuclear meltdown, and to think her punk cousin leon thought he was going to stand in her way.
Date: 06/16/19 06:21 am Title: Chapter 15: Helmet of Bronze
Well that was hella empowering after the last chapter. I love how many emotional ups and downs I've been having with this story. Now on to the Kammiverse plots and intrigue and my continued obsession with Brook.
Date: 06/15/19 04:24 pm Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
Poor Elsie...I hope her parents either figure it out soon or are disposed of properly - seeing her so emotionally distraught is tough... (but compelling!)
Author's Response: She will find a parent who actually cares dw :)
Date: 06/15/19 02:47 pm Title: Chapter 14: Dress Shirt
Holy fox! Why can't her cousin just shut up just why saying something without letting her explain? Now I will be teasingly worried for her Vale ;-; Elsie don't have a lot of option right now other then Maddy or Brook to help her for some day. I almost have the same type of family then her with prejudice so this chapter got really on my heart, and her parent are goddamn scary.... You suceeded to grant us her feeling and the tension she feel in the situation and arround her family, awesome chapter overflowing with cuteness and meaning like always,
Thank a lot Vale for this chapter
Date: 06/15/19 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 13: Flowy Robes
Gosh, Vale please stop the cuteness of those two just please I'm dying... Medic!!
No seriously the cuteness and warm feeling it give me is too much for me to say in word it is just a pure bliss and gosh I wish I could have seen both of their antics they just look like the most lovely and silly couple you could have created I loooove them so much!! !
Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm glad you enjoy it, because writing it is a blast!
Date: 06/15/19 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 14: Dress Shirt
Forest fires are a part of the life cycle of nature, when the forest must clean out the old that choke it's future. The soot left over enrich the life that grows anew. Elsie is only in the process of removing the holdovers holding her back. Love everything that you do :)
Author's Response: Yup! Exactly! Burn out the old choking brush.
Date: 06/15/19 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 14: Dress Shirt
Gosh Elsie family is such a toxic environment to live in, I hope brook or maddy comes along and give them a heavy dose of karma. Hopefully everything starts looking up for Elsie soon
Author's Response: Yeahhhh pretty f****** toxic
Date: 06/15/19 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 14: Dress Shirt
SHIT SHIT FUCK SHIT FUCK ABORT RUN ABORT GOD DAMMIT FUCK THE COUSINS FUCK THE PARENTS FUCK THE CHURCH THIS IS SUCH A BAD SITUATION FUCK VALE YOU GAVE ME AN ANXIETY SPIKE YOU WRITE TOO WELL AND MAKE ME TOO INVESTED IN YOUR CHARACTERS I LOVE IT BUT ALSO FUCK ELSIE PROTECT NEED TO PROTECT
Author's Response: Hah, sorrryyyyyyyyyyyy. Needed to happen some time
Date: 06/12/19 01:52 am Title: Chapter 13: Flowy Robes
Fool! Brook is best girl, I won't hear anything against this fact. Other than shipping this is a damn fine story, I'm looking forward to reading more. I just hope that Brook gets a happy ending, she already got rejected by Coby and it sounds like Elsie isn't romantically or emotionally interested in her. Elsie will have proven herself a real bitch if she plays around with Brook's heart
Date: 06/09/19 02:54 am Title: Chapter 13: Flowy Robes
Kammiverse! Lesbo-love! (We can hope.) SO nicely done, thank you for this story and please keep going for a long time. Indeed, "it might be fun." Plus I hope to see Elsie get the better of, or away from, her stereotypical horrific parents; come to peace with irreversible transition if that's what's happening; find love; and perhaps figure out ways to use her powers heroically.
Date: 06/07/19 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 13: Flowy Robes
Oh my gosh Maddy us such a freaking flirt! I absolutely love seeing her out of her shell. Agh, these two are way too adorable together. Man poor Elsie has some seriously amazing women in her life between Brook, Maddy, and even her teacher I think.
Hmm, I kinda hope this will stay a sort of slice of life story, not that it has too of course. It's just that it'd be interesting to see how a emerged lives a regular life in the world.
Date: 06/04/19 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 11: Big Fluffy Jumper
Read someone else previous comments and I have to say I absolutely love Brook. She's a unique character who is open to her own desires. If she does happen to be Elsei's first its obvious she would be incredibly loving and tender as she has already shown to be a very sweet girl. Plus she was willing to help Elsie grow closer to Maddy in spite of her own feelings. Also she has only really shown her sexual nature to Elsie so far, sure she's a bit of a voyeure but she hasnt done anything overly explicit either Her actions show she's confident and that she doesnt mind showing off a little bit. But in absolutley no way is she a 'slut'.
Author's Response: You are awesome. Brook is so cool I'm glad I get to write her.
Date: 06/04/19 11:19 am Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
Fair enough. Maybe I need to revisit some chapters, since I can't remember all of those characters (Oscar?). Of course, the other issue is that it can difficult to be sure whether a character is transgender if their actions thus far would be unaffected either way.
You forgot about Oliver (cis, presumably) and Johanna (trans). Either way, this wasn't a criticism.
Date: 06/04/19 05:02 am Title: Chapter 12: Scuffed Jeans
Hey I love this story so far but please please please don't let Elsie's "first time" be with Brook she deserves better than some slut that goes after literally everybody
Author's Response: Excuse me but in this house we don't s*** shame. Elsie is perfectly within her rights to explore her sexuality however she wants to.
Date: 06/04/19 04:17 am Title: Chapter 11: Big Fluffy Jumper
That's so cute and lovely chapter just like you. You are so adorable and so is Elsie and Maddy. Thank you so much for your hardwork and sharing this beautiful story . I will be reading more
Author's Response: THANK YOU SANRO. YOu're a cutie too!!!!
Date: 06/04/19 03:19 am Title: Chapter 1: Loose Shirt
You're correct. That was a typo, I meant to say named EMERGED characters, hence the bit about the transgender community and Laithe. I was also counting stories besides yours, which WILDLY inflate the proportions.
Also, I can be fairly confident that Flicker and Seraph are cis, based on the Twitter exchange. Are you just not counting them because their legal names haven't been revealed?
Is Caser trans? I didn't think the term applied to people who identified as non-binary. That's why I phrased it as "not cis" rather than "trans".
Author's Response: They are stories about trans people, posted on a site for stories about trans people, based in a universe where people gain powers based on the subconscious needs and desires. Even then, the number of trans to cis emerged in my stories is in favour of the cis. Vaughn, Kelly, Seraph, Flicker, Bastion, Unbowed, Oscar, Nel, and three more who haven't been revealed to be Emerged, vs the five trans ppl mentioned earlier. I'm probably missing out one or two I've forgotten about. I'm not sure about the other stories, but within my own work, the cis outnumber the trans by quite a lot. That isn't even taking into account queer magnetism.
Date: 06/04/19 02:00 am Title: Chapter 12: Scuffed Jeans
You know, it is weird to consider how few named characters in the Kammiverse are cisgender. I mean, I guess a fair number are unspecified, but even if you assume all of them are cis, they are still a minority. We know from Laithe that the vast majority of the transgender community didn't emerge in the first Emergence, but it still seems wildly disproportionate.
Is that going to be a plot point, or is it just writing what you want?
Author's Response: I think you might be confused. Here are the named cis characters in my Kammiverse stories: Jocelyn, Kelly, Vaughn, Barb, Unbowed/Al, Maddy, Brook, Elsie's mum and dad, Diana, Oscar, Eric. There are at least five more cis characters slated to appear in this story alone as well. Meanwhile, there is a grand total of 5 trans characters in my stories: Kalia, Laithe, Caser, Elsie and briefly Tinker Tailor. That is twelve to five. Cis outnumbers trans.
Date: 06/03/19 09:33 am Title: Chapter 11: Big Fluffy Jumper
Alright, first of all as someone interested in art I will say you completely got their class personality writted which I really appreciated a lot. And I quite trailed to know what Elsie gonna do about her parent and who she is gonna choose between brook and maddie, that teasing is completely driving me insane like probably all the story of the kammiverse universe and your ability of you and the others to make think affect me in more emotional way then any others story, it is really rare to start reading something and immediately start liking all the character that you have made as alive as real person, so you have my thanks Valerie to make a smile come across my face after your chapter and sip off my hatred more and more toward Elsie parent that remind me of my own.
Date: 06/02/19 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 11: Big Fluffy Jumper
In a rude and cruel world, these lesbiabs are a shining beacon of cute that brightens my day. It's so exciting that Elsie is getting in touch with her desires. Now if only she'd realize that Maddy is gay as hell
Date: 05/28/19 03:48 pm Title: Chapter 9: Lacy Bralette
I love this one. I like that it is less heros and villains and more just a normal person getting use to a new normal. And on top of that she is a closeted transwoman, this story just keeps tugging on my heart.
That being said I really want Elise and Brook together. It's obvious that they both like each other. I think Elise is just scared because she felt wrong when Brook confessed to her when she was still a guy.
Date: 05/28/19 03:34 pm Title: Chapter 9: Lacy Bralette
Thank you for the chapter. Still got me trying to figure how Elsie powers, the way It was told was that Elsie is like a blank canvas that can do crazy tricks and moves, so when her powers take hold it guide's her through the motions, afterwards she can kinda turn it off but her body goes through the motions but not as well when she has it on.
When you think about if she combines this with learning martial art she could become quite deadly in combat.
Again thanks for the great chapter and keep up the hard work.