Date: 11/13/19 05:52 am Title: The End of the Brigade
So on the one hand, you've been setting this up the whole time, and it kinda seemed… deserved? On the other hand, massive personal failings leading to pain for others is distasteful. So… good?
Anyway, a very fun, readable story! Thanks for sharing!
Date: 08/30/19 11:47 am Title: The End of the Brigade
I cannot express how sad this ending makes me. Certainly not in a "badly written" way, but more in a "I love these characters and want to see them happy" sort of way.
I can't wait for the sequel.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm not sure how long it'll take me to post a chapter for book 2, because I'm planning to actually outline this time. But thank you so much for reading!
Date: 08/23/19 12:01 pm Title: Tournament Arc
Such an entertaining story. I get confused at times, but I'm okay with that. I really liked Fiona's little story. I bet she was super cute when she was a friendly little blob, poking things with her pseudo pods. If I had self-transformation abilities, I would totally have cat ears. Also, they way you described her personality, her hesitancy and confusion regarding social norms, that's a perfect description of what it's like to be on the autism spectrum from the inside. So now I feel like I really understand this character.
Date: 08/18/19 10:11 pm Title: The Four Heroes of Prophecy
This is such a wonderful story! It starts out delightfully silly, seeming like harmless episodic fluff, but gets deeper and more emotionally resonant as it goes along and more of the characters' backstories are revealed and the larger plot comes together, while still remaining exrtemely funny. Bravo!
Date: 08/13/19 10:11 pm Title: The Blessing of Sanguis
Oof ow pain ouch that shit hurteded
Well. Thats a big reveal? And mysterious background? I like how the potion stealing went even if you teased bedsharing TWICE and broke my lil heart. Its really cool that you set up this dramatic plan to steal the recipe and then just swipe it at the end.
Date: 08/13/19 09:46 pm Title: The Big Time
Thoroughly enjoyable. The wisdom from andra was particularly unexpected. It kinda executed like a lil childrens show moral and im lowkey in love with how it went. Nightengale taking a hit was crazy because it felt like a "no good deed goes unpunished" but she got fixed up so overall it was really feel good. The begining with arguing their way into accepting the quest was thoroughly enjoyable and the little bits like the napkin wars and Extremely Relateable charming/vines bit just made it so much fun. The slimes were odd? But it was a fun engagement as well. Idk how they eacaped them if they were so fast but oh well.
Date: 08/13/19 08:58 pm Title: Desecrating a Monastery
Oh so riven is a conessuier of charms then. xD
An interesting chapter? It feels like some of the whimsy of the previous chapters didnt make it into this one. No real surprises this time i guess? I mostly expected the "demon" to not be a demon at all but the incubus bait and switch was fine. Its really good plot progress for the wonderous dummies but it didnt impress or substantially subvert expectations like previous chapters.
Date: 08/13/19 08:12 pm Title: Interlude: Fiona and Riven Buy a Weapon
Ugh i ship it so hard. I cant tell if the angst is gonna be torturous slowburn or if they are just gonna spontaneously fuck but whatever it is it will be glorious. Fiona is gonna be such a soft domme im slain.
Date: 08/13/19 07:55 pm Title: Murder Mystery
This is absolutely goofy.
I actually snorted when the book keeper just gave up the info in the face of explicitly not being threatened. And then in the final moments the wacky accusations just spiral into ridiculousness but its apparently spot on??? And frankly it might as well be. This reads like 4 highly unstable internet gremlins sat down with the sole goal of derailing a dnd campaign and its an absolute delight to behold.
~~even if there isnt any TG yet >:|
Date: 08/13/19 12:18 am Title: Bad Reputation
great start! the characters have a lot of adorable/infuriating nuance and the plot is absolutely charming. i didn't feel like there were any lulls in the pacing and altogether it is a very humorous and revealing set up for the characters.
Date: 08/12/19 08:29 pm Title: Good Things Happen to Andra
Wow so the entire party... interesting. Also... well this sucks for Alina, losing her powers... what is she gonna do now? I hope they find that goddess and slap the hell out of her. Or Alina finds a BETTER Goddess that is less of a disgusting TERF.
And YAY Andra got a win! Poor Riven still no happy ending...
Date: 08/08/19 11:09 pm Title: Interlude: An Actual Short Tale About Fiona
I AM FURIOUS! PARACELSUS YOU DO NOT BEAT YOUR CHILDREN YOU MONSTER! I DON"T CARE WHAT YOU WANT! YOU NEED TO ACCEPT THAT YOU DON"T GET TO DETERMINE YOUR CHILDREN'S DESTINY! IT"S THEIRS NOT YOURS YOU CREEP!!!!!
Date: 07/31/19 03:43 am Title: Political Intrigue
I hate to admit I'm enjoying this story because it's so weird. But well-written. Where's the TG? Oh, wait, everyone important is TG? Huh. Etc. So I wonder where you're going to take them, and us, next. Endless possibilities for this lucky(?) gang of misfits and loser#### troubled souls.
Date: 07/12/19 05:13 am Title: Family Dinner
I wont spoil it but HOLY FUDGE. I suspected but I never though.... because of that church thing and the rules.. Just... wow. I love Riven's brother and Fiona's reveal that was awesome. And YES hold that transphobe down! Hehe I love this story so much!!!
Date: 07/07/19 08:23 pm Title: Sci-fi Epic
OH SNNAP A CURSE! This is the most awesome kind of curse I've ever seen and it fits the fae soooo well. I love it! I've never seen a fae curse described this amazingly! Also wow Nightingale is always pining for Alina but really... Riven is right there, you two could literally be soul mates... Give her a chance. I wanna see Riven get her mind controlled happy ending... come on Nightingale wake up!
Date: 07/02/19 05:05 pm Title: A Bug in the System
I want to bash Copernicus with my frying pan (I can do that, I'm pan) he's a transphobic creep!! But AWWWEW BOOKWORM IS SO CUTE! And wow I just love this story so much and all your characters. I love how even if they are the bumbling sillies of the world they still understand consent and doing the right thing.
Date: 07/01/19 05:21 pm Title: A Bug in the System
I am really loving these quirky, weird, lovable, stupid, brilliant crazy characters. They're bonkers in every way - and they totally remind me of a D&D group somehow bumbling through an adventure by accident. They're hillarious - and I really like all four main characters. Please write more!
Date: 06/28/19 12:07 pm Title: Bad Reputation
Honestly, I do not know if I should laugh or cry. This story is an emotionally stretching ball for me. I was thinking they were becoming friends, but now i am not so confident that is possible. Thank you. Your writing is wonderful and keeps me full of caution for the next chapter.
Date: 06/18/19 08:41 pm Title: Interlude: Four Short Tales
I hate that "goddess" more and more. "She is being punished so we cant heal her." I hope they shove a moldy cupcake in her mouth and make her step on legos forever!!! It's a CHILD what did she do wrong? Find a boy attractive? Date a trans girl? Like she's a CHILD who the fudge cares you gender crit asshole! Goddess Damn you Sanguis to hell! Also yay Riven, stick it to the system! And omg Andra... poor girl. I mean yeah she's privileged to be like royalty or something but wow. Also what the fudge was the thing that the queen did to Alina? I'm so confused. Also... Fiona was a construct... what?! Or a faerie maybe? Woaaaaaah
Date: 06/18/19 02:30 pm Title: The Blessing of Sanguis
Ah, so here we go. The introduction of trans-experience into the plot. Honestly, I think what I love most about this chapter, is that I've never seen Riven as trans. So when she reveals that this chapter, I'm just as surprised as everyone else. She was always just a woman to me. And honestly - isn't that just trans goals? To not have it be the sole defining part of our identity?
I'm not ashamed of it, and I own it, but to be seen and viewed as a woman by everyone I talk to, like Riven is; that's the dream right there.
Also fuck that religion. I was super down for it before, but now Sanguis can go fuck herself with a cactus >:(
Date: 06/16/19 11:27 pm Title: The Blessing of Sanguis
Oops, lol. That was unexpected. Wait, is Fiona's sleeve going to get pregnant now? What about the carpet? Will there be tiny little rugs slithering around the house munching on things? Does that mean they're rug-munchers?
Author's Response: lol! That is a horrifying thought!
Date: 06/16/19 10:26 am Title: The Blessing of Sanguis
Oh God it's a literal Radfem's Goddess... super YIKES! Also jeez Fiona show a little sympathy here... poor Riven. I really feel bad for her... Ugh stupid Sanguis, I hope she steps on legos!!!!!!
Author's Response: Yeah, I originally envisioned Sanguis as some sort of perfect protector of women, but as I was shaping the story I realized it would be more interesting to make her a terf goddess. I like the idea that trans people are DEFYING THE GODS THEMSELVES
Date: 06/05/19 07:10 pm Title: Desecrating a Monastery
Fiona is quickly becoming my favorite, even if she doesn't seem to have very many lines. Fluttershy characters are just so cuuuute. Also awwwwww he was showing them their true selves. Leave that evil god and his evil homophobic followers! You don't want none of that! you can do it! Break free and be the happy gay men you are!
Also wow such misogynistic pricks too, they deserve to have their temple burned to the ground.
Also... you may only have sex with other women? Yikes Bi and Pan women get the serious shaft here and that's sad.
Date: 06/05/19 12:36 pm Title: Desecrating a Monastery
This story continues to surprise and entertain. And I like how you've set up the plot so that you can do quick, satisfying chapters each with their own plot and resolution. Like a TV sitcom or something.
Author's Response: Yeah, I'm drawing a lot of inspiration from anime, so the chapters ended up pretty episodic, at least in the early parts of the story.
Date: 05/29/19 07:34 pm Title: Interlude: Fiona and Riven Buy a Weapon
Oh snap, is that love spell still in affect or are two little doves in a crushy wushy together? Also... Fiona is totes TG'd or something, It's what I guess anyway. I'mc urious we'll see. Maybe it was intentional and she's happy to be her real self but is a super shy Fluttershy type girl as her real self and awww I just wanna hug her!