Date: 04/01/19 11:57 am Title: Chapter 1
An interesting story, especially from the perspective of the physical changes.
The ending was a little abrupt, but I guess you told the story you wanted to tell.
Nice job, and thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Thanks~! Sorry the ending was a bit abrupt. I originally had a longer scene, but had to cut it due to submission length restrictions on DA. I'd like to continue this sometime though...
Date: 03/30/19 06:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ah, much better, now. Good job. If you could do a little editing, it would help. You have a tendency to leave out words.
Author's Response: Leave out words? I'll have to re-read through it again to double check, but I don't think I did that? It might just be a problem with the HTML formatter I used.