Date: 04/03/19 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 82
The story is engaging and in respect to my earlier review, your prose has definitely improved over the course of these chapters and become more natural in structure and flow. I wonder how long you spent writing these 83 chapters?
Author's Response: About 3 months, I started writing on January 10th, so you can say I am still new ^^
Date: 04/02/19 03:31 am Title: Chapter 24: Erin's decision
Man, this is a highfly confusing tale. Nothing, you'd expect from a vampire story. I found it a strange decision to make animal blood the same quality as human. Kinda undermining the whole human apex predator concept. Was I naive. Turns out, they aren't even undead! Can propagate, eat, walk under the sun. In all honesty, these aren't vampires...in any traditional sense at least.
Well, an unhealthy amount of surprises, but great story still. So keep up great work.
Im abit tired of this whole Richard this, Richard that stuff. Even though there aren't any masquerade going on and mingling among unsuspecting human, I hope, Erin will have go solo and meet up with some other societies at some point. Like the aforementioned elves or dwarves, I dunno.
Date: 03/31/19 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 16: Conversation
Poor Erin... I hope this kid can see his family again... This is pretty awful, being thrown into a scary world with scary people not knowing anything. On top of that this scary guy wants to marry him and wants him to kill more people? Poor Erin... can you give him a hug for me?
Date: 03/28/19 12:58 am Title: Chapter 5: Awakening
As primitively as its written at start, this story is a feast for my eyes. Instafav and can't wait for the developments ahead. Looks like vampires are OP here. Will Erin also be able to see and feel stuff over great distances?
Will meet up with Sam's companions and make way to the village now, I guess.