Date: 03/31/19 06:34 am Title: Chapter 4
Wow, this story is definitely bigger than one person.
It reminds me of Quantum Leap. Michael has gone back in time, lost his memory, and is occupying a different body. Maybe he was sent back in time to save Makayla's life?
In surprised he didn't go through the backpack the night before; to look for a phone charger, and to look for clues to what happened to him.
At any rate, you're great at cliffhangers, I can't wait for the next chapter.
Date: 03/30/19 02:59 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow, this is really turning into an epic tale!
Great descriptions of Makayla's surroundings. I could picture myself standing there in the woods with her, listening to the rain.
Since Dolly was born on 7/5/96 I would have to say Michael has traveled back in time to the summer of 1996.
Date: 03/29/19 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 3
Enjoying the great writing, and the first-person POV as the story unfolds. I would expect Makayla to figure out pretty quick that she's in the past. You describe her as somewhat, mysteriously, roughed up at the start... Seems she should be griping or at least reflecting on physical pains, plus I'd love to hear more about her weird cross-gender perceptions too. Yeah I know the situation is already complex and unpleasant, but she seems fairly comfortable already with her new body and her injuries.
Date: 03/25/19 10:04 am Title: Chapter 2
So we have an old land-line phone, a newspaper from 1997, and people unfamiliar with cell phones. An unfortunate coincidence; or did Michael travel through time as well as physical location, an age change, and a gender change to boot?
Was there an original Makayla and is she now Michael in the present time?
And who keeps bugging Makayla about whether or not she made it?
Excellent cliffhanger, can't wait to read more.