Date: 06/26/19 08:32 pm Title: The Scan
I was hoping for a loving end not a vicious circle, but your ending was the way I thought you were going to do. I was hoping for my option, but I’m a sucker for a happy ending.
Author's Response: Oh! Right. Sorry, this was always going to be dark. I'll post one with an ending you like soon! Look for Final Final.
Date: 06/26/19 04:42 pm Title: Closing Ceremony
Incredible! Can you make short story for Amarettos time at the Morgans? The build up was great and it'd be nice to explore that world a bit
Author's Response: Can you settle for a different girl in a similar circumstance? If so, it's already drafted!
Date: 06/26/19 04:06 pm Title: The Scan
You had me right to the end! Like I've said before, you had to have had this story planned out completely before word one was written.
Great story, unfortunately, no more surprises.
Looking forward to the next one as you never let me down!
Author's Response: I didn't want to use any "cheap stunts" so once it was all out in the open, the mystery was solved. Glad you liked it!
Date: 06/25/19 03:56 pm Title: The Scan
Hmm, ok, so who sent in the picture then? There were only two people who knew about the picture. I've been thinking that Stephanie was a boy, she never had sex. I thought she set this up for herself.
Author's Response: You can see notes in the Epilogue.
Date: 06/23/19 02:07 pm Title: The Choice
Bummer, was really hoping Roger would step in to buy her. Guess we're not getting the white knight ending
Author's Response: While I won't spoil it, I will say that, no, oh my god, no, there is no white knight or any other happy-everything-worked-out-surprisingly-well ending.
Date: 06/19/19 02:56 pm Title: The Scan
Ok, it was a flashback. Makes sense now.
Author's Response: You might remember that I gave hints about what happened to Peter while in college. But I had to make them subtle or it would give away the story. Now, I hope, you can connect those dots and pick out the little snippets that you might have read right past earlier in the story.
Date: 06/17/19 03:37 pm Title: The Scan
Lies lies and more lies. Amereto needs to get out of there.
Author's Response: Here's the interesting thing. They never quite lied to her. Lies of omission, yes, but they were always careful to manipulate her without directly lying. I thought that made them a bit more sinister.
Date: 06/16/19 05:17 pm Title: Sales Brochure
In a rational aspect there is not much sense in becoming a slave.
As an independend escort the money could be gained within a year. The money would even count as a necessary expense and lower taxes.
Prostitution don't has to be bad. One of the main problems are pimps who take all the money.
In the story setting you try to make the contract air tight but in most countries pimping is outlawed. With this the contract would be void. Also it would make good evidence in a criminal court.
Usually prostitutes don't call out their pimps because they fear violence, have no hard evidence, don't know better or are in a lovetrap.
Author's Response: I tried to address this somewhat by noting Peter's fear of shame if he took them to court. And since pimps do exist, I suppose I just assumed that these girls are like those who are ok with that.
Date: 06/16/19 12:59 pm Title: Sales Brochure
I wonder if we will have there first runaway?? I saw this coming. AWESOME STORYLINE
Author's Response: You guessed it right. Still, I think the ending might have some details you didn't know were coming (the clues were harder to notice).
Date: 06/15/19 10:28 pm Title: The Scan
Ah, so then my guess about Stephanie is correct, just in another way. I thought he/she had him/her sent there for him/her but I now see the how it is. Intricate. As I said before, everything had to be planned out from the beginning.
Author's Response: I think you're going to like the ending.
Date: 06/14/19 06:52 pm Title: Last
Omg! Incredible twist. Definitely saw part of it coming but not the whole "we would own you" aspect.
Author's Response: Hopefully, you see these twists and get a shock but nothing feels like it was just invented without support leading up to it.
Date: 06/12/19 02:30 pm Title: Two: Girls
I think bbn it is obvious that there are buyers for these trained concubine. The girl with the bangs is being fashioned for a client, just like the girl made up as a Japanese lolita type earlier.
Author's Response: I can't wait for you to get to the ending!
Date: 06/07/19 08:41 am Title: Four-Three
Just waiting for the shoe to drop. Now he is suppose to get money for his hair soon. I don't remember if the contract every really said his hair will be cut. It could just be auctioned off or paid for by another. Then he and his money goes with the hair.
Date: 06/04/19 03:22 pm Title: The Scan
The clues are all through the story, from beginning to end.
This story had to have been planned down to the last detail before the first word was written.
Very well written, well written indeed, possibly your best.
Author's Response: Edits, edits, and more edits. Thanks so much!
Date: 05/29/19 09:50 pm Title: The Scan
Ok, what is Stephanie's motive for this?does she want to be the dominant in the relationship or does she want a reason to break up or is there just money involved?
Author's Response: Now I can't wait for you to get to the end!!!
Date: 05/29/19 03:04 pm Title: Counting the Days
I’m waiting for the other shoe to drop,special,after she signed papers with out reading them.
Author's Response: There's another shoe (a platform heel, of course). I won't spoil anything for you but I like that you're guessing!
Date: 05/28/19 01:05 pm Title: Cog in the Wheel
What will Amaretto's name be in 2 weeks? I think our kitten will be surprised. Somehow this spa lowers the IQ by 20 points it seems or make people so accepting.
Will Amaretto have any more procedures? Maybe she'll have a special assignment after her hair is cut.
Author's Response: Maybe there is something special waiting...
Date: 05/26/19 03:00 pm Title: Top of the Pyramid
That conversation with the receptionist was so intense! At the same time, I love seeing what's going on but it only makes me wonder more! So, so, so good!
Author's Response: I liked that conversation because it was a fun way to tell a little more about Promena. Glad you liked it!
Date: 05/22/19 01:13 pm Title: E Tu?
I mean i kinda saw it coming a little bit (really smol) but still. holy shit. well played.
Author's Response: That was my hope - not so much mystery that you were taken off guard but enough to still make it shocking. More "holy s***" moments to come!
Date: 05/19/19 06:51 pm Title: Another Test
Hmm, seems like others have plans for Amaretto are being hinted at. So far he/she has stripped and modeled. I'll assume Tawny will introduce her to taking money before the bigger plan is revealed. But it might be a hoot, if his fiance or her family be involved in his transformation.
Author's Response: There are plenty of hints - some you'll come back to after you understand everything and say, "oh! I see!" (or, at least, I hope so!)
Date: 05/11/19 10:12 pm Title: Committed
Ok, by this time in your stories I can usually have an idea where the story is going, at least a guess. In thos case, I haven't a clue! Keep up the writing.
Author's Response: My favorite part of Pink Auburn is the way it all comes together. When you get to the very end, you'll see every chapter you read in a new way. Or at least, that's my hope!
Date: 05/06/19 01:19 pm Title: New Options
So when are the men going begin coming to his room for a goodnight kiss? Not sure but is the size of his penis when hard, is so out of a cold shower he does need any tape.
Some body jewelry is needed I think. Maybe with a script he can't quite read.
Date: 05/02/19 03:48 pm Title: The Scan
I agree with Ecmarm. Also, by referencing Trump it dates your story making it less interesting for the future since the plot doesn't involve Trump or his actions toward Peter.
Author's Response: You're right about dating the story.
Date: 05/02/19 03:12 pm Title: One Good Change
Hmm. I can't see how this decision can go wrong. Could be poor understanding by the staff how far the changes between the legs should go.
Author's Response: I'll just remind you this story is twisted (really, not kidding about that). I hope that, as long as you're prepared, you'll find it entertaining!
Date: 05/02/19 01:56 pm Title: The Scan
What a bad idea to suddenly, with utterly no need and without it helping the story unfold, inject your political opinion. The line: "because hiding my big penis under so little material is like hiding Donald Trump’s tax cuts for the rich under the lie he’s trying to help everyone" is strained and just stupid. It's your story and you can write what you want, I guess, but you should stop this now.
Date: 04/29/19 03:43 pm Title: My Hall Pass
Yes, something is controlling Peter's attitude that gets rid of his short term being lucid so quickly by kissing the other women. And the Check probably likes to have Amaretto while he sips amaretto.
Author's Response: I'm not saying but remember two things: one, this is "realistic" (as I define it so that's a little loose) and twisted (not kidding there). :)
Date: 04/28/19 01:57 pm Title: The Scan
I am sure this will be corrected, but a duplicate chapter was posted.
Good writing. In response to Barton about posting multiple chapters, it could be done with one long post with multiple chapters in the post. That way people will not miss a chapter.
It is very interesting. It does seems he is becoming compliment for the transitions awfully quickly. Something else must be going on to effect him like that. Also, it seems he being a he when he should be a she is known by many who are pretending that they don't know. But that is just guess on my part.
Author's Response: Ugh! Posted a duplicate chapter. Ugh, I say! I like the rhythm of chapter breaks and you might notice they vary in length but end when the scene ends. Putting another in the same post wouldn't have the same effect, especially when I want a little suspense. As to something else going on, well, I can't say (yet). :)
Date: 04/26/19 05:02 pm Title: Vessel
Chloe i love the pictures selection and can't wait for the inevitable! Please release a few extra chapters this weekend!!!
Author's Response: The trouble is, even if I tell everyone I posted two chapters 500-1000 readers always miss the first one and, particularly with this story, that creates a problem for the reader. Glad you like it!