Reviews For The White Bikini
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Reviewer: baq17 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/26/19 07:49 pm Title: The Lost Bet

I absolutely loved this story. You did a great job of turning an old trope into something fresh, so well done! Wish this could happen to me :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it

Reviewer: Verra Rogue Signed star Report
Date: 02/26/19 08:38 am Title: The Lost Bet

Sorry, but I cannot say that I can appreciate this, even as pure smut, which I assume was the idea. The sex barely consists of any more than a very brief description of penises entering orifices. The rest of the story is similarly lacking in detail (and effort. I wouldn't want to discourage you if this is your first story or if you are quite young, but otherwise, you can do better.)

Sorry to knock your rating down but it had to be done.

Author's Response: Donít see how youíre trying to not be discouraging while being completely condescending, but I appreciate the feedback all the same.

Reviewer: AlexiaRose Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/22/19 05:13 pm Title: The Lost Bet

I am so turned on right now imaging that I am Mike/Michaela. I wish I could find a curse object to let me be a slutty woman. You really wrote a great fantasy read for me.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It turned me on while writing it, so Iím glad to hear it had a similar effect on you! Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/21/19 08:01 pm Title: The Lost Bet

Nice and to the point, but still with good details on the transformation.
Would be nice to read the reaction the entity that set up the bikini had (if any).
Thank you.

Author's Response: Definitely what I was going for, glad you enjoyed it! And I agree, thatís something I think I should have touched on. Thanks for the feedback!

Reviewer: Natasa Jacobs Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/20/19 06:02 pm Title: The Lost Bet

That was a great short story

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading!

Reviewer: Lunatastic Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/19/19 02:11 pm Title: The Lost Bet

Quick and to the point

Author's Response: Exactly what I was going for. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Slipstream Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/19/19 04:31 am Title: The Lost Bet

I enjoyed this. Very good transformation.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Really been enjoying the story you're working on, so this means a lot.

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