Date: 08/21/19 01:48 pm Title: Chain Reaction
Wow! I cannot wait to see where this goes. Hopefully she can get back to Lauren in time to help her, or save her. Lauren seems really cool and it'd be sweet if our soon to be young woman can get the girl.
Author's Response: Lauren will definitely have a part in this and maybe our main character can still get the girl ;)
Date: 08/21/19 01:28 am Title: Chain Reaction
Now this was a very interesting chapter to read, I wonder what realm or place Ethan was at and who the mystery woman was. Im definitely looking forward to what happens next.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review :) Glad that you are enjoying it
Date: 07/13/19 12:23 am Title: Tickling the Dragon's Tail
I like where this story is going so far, and honestly don't really have much to critique here. Its a good setup for a "very cis dude" (i dunno if your going for a trans gal egg but it kinda felt like you wrote an trans gal egg) who wanted to have a regular day with his crush that turned into something ala "The Mist". I know you already said to excuse the dream sequence but it wasn't really that bad, feeling like some sort of prophetic dream to ethan about what he is going to encounter later the same day. the only issue i would have with it is that you could have gone more in detail with the angel that was dragging ethan into the air, but that is a nitpick. overall, 10/10 want to read more and am interested in what you are going to do with this.
Date: 06/20/19 04:44 pm Title: Acute Exposure
Gosh I love the first chaoter of, you have succeed to give.... that dream a big meaning, and I like is couple of friend they are adorable and look like real trustyfull person I would put my life in there hand... I also didnt see any wrong part if its the ending its not bad even more if I think about the shy but curious personality of Ethan a great work in the making . Rylune trust me!