Date: 03/16/20 01:27 am Title: Home Life
"Marcus stayed silent. It really was what happened, the bus driver was regularly late. "
Kid's dad sounds like an idjit. And the kid is an idjit, too. How hard is it to do a photo with a time-stamp nowadays? Everyone has a cell-phone that can do that.
Date: 04/21/19 07:47 pm Title: Intruding Elements
CURRENTLY THO. I WANNA SEE HER RUN INTO PEOPLE AND BAM CRAZY SHIT. It’s going to be mega fun. A reaction from parents involving "Yeah! Look at me! I'm cute af now what you gonna do about it? I think that's it now for review spam... but we shall see!
Author's Response: *hugs* thanks for the reviews friend
Date: 04/21/19 07:43 pm Title: Intruding Elements
Jk Multiple reviews time!! I'm also excited to see more develpment of the two relationships. I'm hoping to see some first kisses, because that always makes me happy, but I know this story might not be about that.
Date: 04/21/19 07:40 pm Title: Intruding Elements
I am on my phone which means... short review. I love this story so much. Sometimes I reread or just think about the whole staying at lucie's place chapters. Her parents are so cool. It's great fluffy parental feels, and gender affirmation too!
Date: 04/08/19 02:15 pm Title: The New Girl
First - love this story, it's super adorable.
Second - Kind of a crash course in realizing your trans for Anna here. She definitely figured it out faster than I did. Granted, she's been kinda thrust into a situation that really forced her to confront these feelings so /shrug
Third - Love the enby representation! Really can't get enough of that in stories.
Fourth - The gang's all here and transformed - except for Jules. He better watch out or something might happen to him soon!
Fifth - Qelhatat is intriguing. On the one hand, taking over people's bodies and murdering their minds or whatever is pretty damn evil. But maybe she had to do it to survive? We don't really know enough about her tbh. And she seems to be being pretty nice to Anna, so... If she doesn't consume Anna, how will their situation evolve exactly? I can't imagine her being the type to just hang out passively in the passenger's seat.
Sixth - Um... That's all for now! Looking forward to the next chapter~! ^-^
Date: 03/04/19 07:32 pm Title: The New Girl
Feels like a cartoon, fast paced and fun to read.
Super cute as well! Looking forward to more:)
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm both happy and unsurprised to hear such a comparison! I won't say it was my *intent*, as I just more or less let my pen write whatever it wants the way it wants to, but I absolutely recognize that my writing style is heavily inspired by cartoons, anime, comics and other stuff from my child and teenhood, and if anything I'm happy about that.
Date: 02/27/19 08:23 pm Title: The New Girl
you hooked me with this first chapter. the whole 'new person comes to town' angle is a brilliant conceit. and you manage to do a great deal of world building in a very short span of time! can't wait to see where this goes. xo, charlotte
Date: 02/26/19 07:00 pm Title: Looking Sharp
If there was a gap in between writing chapters, then this chapter definitely didn't show it. Exciting and fun as always. I love how all the teens just totally roll with whatever is facing them. And the support they give each other is so sweet.
Date: 02/24/19 05:29 am Title: The New Additions
Oh me? I'm not angry about it at all. I think it's awesome. And I can see. You have such a unique cast I love it.
Author's Response: Haha, donít worry, I was directing the angry part to whoever might read. Hmm... Thanks for finding my cast interesting. Whenever I look at them I just see the collection of tropes Iíve built them from, so having someone else just enjoying them certainly alleviates a lot of doubts. I guess I must write good or something, haha! ...Well, more like adequately, says modesty.
Date: 02/23/19 05:16 am Title: Here Again
It's okay, it's good you don't burn yourself out, I'd be worried! It's good to take things slow. Now the story, oooh she kinda oversimplified how her parents are. They literally blame her for everything. Also Lucie had to constantly move... what is she afraid of? (Don't tell me I'm excited to learn though!)
Author's Response: FWIW, this is why it was a lie when she said she felt better. Sheíll get an occasion to talk parents with someone else, and hopefully get to the root of why sheís struggling in regards to that topic. Also, thanks for the kind words!
Date: 02/22/19 05:02 am Title: Tiring Complications
Awwww, only thing I'm sad about is how short these chapters are. I'm so worried what's going to happen... I love that you have a non binary character in here as well as a Trans girl and it's so awesome but... realistically speaking how is Anna going to explain this to her parents, how is the world going to understand a girl who didn't exist according to their records? That's dangerous and I'mm afraid for her. Please hug her and Lucie for me!
Author's Response: Explain to her parents? What parents? I only see discarded plot devices. Sheís an orphan from then on, cuz I say so. /s Your hugs have been transmitted.
Date: 02/22/19 04:57 am Title: Grabbing Attention
This school reminds me of Invader Zim, these people'll fall for anything. Then again none of them believe in magick amulets that can completely transform ones biology or ancient mummies (who threatened her mind you and I'm worried about her) so I suppose change blindness would work.
Date: 02/20/19 07:08 pm Title: The New Self
I just want to give Anna a huge hug. I'm honestly worried about what's going to happen when she gets home to her parents. Also I think all bosses should appreciate a good mohawk. It should show good patience and character to be able to grow and maintain one.
Date: 02/20/19 01:37 pm Title: Lunch Reunion
I'm sure N will find a name that fits them. That period in between of knowing you don't like your name but not knowing what to call yourself is so rough. I'm glad they have good friends to help support them though.
Author's Response: I think by this point it's already come through my writing, but I attach an enormous symbolic importance to names. Usually, characters that have no name don't fully know themselves, names can be rejected or embraced, and sometimes, a moniker or a nickname is the truest name someone can have.
Date: 02/19/19 05:09 pm Title: Accidental Release
Good action scene! It was easy to tell where everyone was and what was going on.
Author's Response: Thatís definitely my favorite chapter for this reason, yeah. I spent... most of my time wasting phase thinking itíd be a shame if that chapter in particular never was seen by anyone but me.
Date: 02/19/19 03:20 pm Title: Corridor Meeting
I'm kind of getting flashbacks to the Deltarune premise :3 that's not a bad thing. Also: I see you, Lucie :D
Author's Response: I mean, this was written *months* before deltarune, but I'll take the excitement anyway :p Lucie's a good bean.