Date: 03/29/19 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 16 Holly! Finally!
That was just totally enjoyable, especially when you delivered, ahem, a climax (or several) after a lot of teasing. But that ending! If you do write a sequel where Rune delivers, I want to see Holly get even somehow, beating (what I called) the meta-game too.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, but no, no sequel. Whenever I've written sequels before, they seem to run out of steam. I do have another story ready, and I'll begin posting it some time next week.
Date: 03/26/19 12:24 pm Title: Chapter 16 Holly! Finally!
Interesting. This is a pretty cool concept and definitely a sexy story! Personally I would have like to see more lesbian action, but the het messing around was pretty good too.
I was a bit worried when the tags said "loses identity", but I guess that's more "all traces of previous life disappeared", not that Larry disappeared. It looks more like Larry just accepted living as Holly, and in a way they merged together, still retaining the memories of both. Which I'm much more ok with than straight up identity death.
Author's Response: Merging would be a good descriptor.
Date: 03/16/19 12:03 am Title: Chapter 12 Another Bright Idea
Fun, fun, fun. Continuing to enjoy this and hoping lots more to follow, although in some ways you're starting into the homestretch.
What if Larry is stuck as Holly? Will he really mind? He hasn't so far -- except for the hetero sex hangup. Which is kind of surprising after this much time and how comfortable, even enjoyable, he's otherwise finding the femininity.
Hmm... Rune set up the game as a lark, is frustrated with it now, might just abandon it in place? Maybe Larry/Holly can work next on beating the META-game, what to do if Rune welshes on the bet and leaves him/her stranded in this life.
Also, who is this mysterious other player? Hmm...
Author's Response: All the answers to come soon.
Date: 03/11/19 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 11 Nearly 5000 Points
I love it when someone uses a clever trick or a loop hole to out smart something or someone, goes to show that the wizard was hasty in making his game. Dont know if your magic system you set up will punish him in someway, since he's being a sore loser now and wont abide to the game he himself made.
Author's Response: We'll see what happens.
Date: 03/06/19 03:57 pm Title: Chapter 1 Discontet
I understood that Larry had a plan. What threw me is at the end it said that Holly could not see a way of getting to 10000 points without sex. It made me think Holly was aware of the bet.
I think now you meet that Larry in Holly doesn't seem to see Larry's original plan and don't know what went wrong. Maybe it was just the use of Holly's name when Larry's name meant to be used.
Thanks for the clarification.
Date: 03/05/19 02:54 pm Title: Chapter 9 Ruminations
Can Holly communicate with Larry? If so, a frank discussion appears needed. Larry might know why original plan not working. Does Holly want to win or just Larry? And does more money helps Larry original plan?
This is a great story. Each chapter leaves me wanting it to be longer and wanting the next to be added asap.
Author's Response: Larry is the one in control. He lets the Holly part of him that came with the body do the day to day things as part of the game. He still has time to win the game (get 10,000 pts so he will owe no money) if he can just do as he always has done by finding a flaw in the game he can exploit. Glad you like the story.
Date: 02/14/19 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 3 The Pitch
Very well-written, and a quirky/unusual premise. Enjoying it so far, thanks. Not quite "getting" Rune's motivation though. So far it's unclear how he's going to "ruin" this mortal's life, or what he gets out of it (just entertainment?), or why he even needs buy-in and consent. Larry certainly doesn't seem to mind the idea of the transformation, perhaps a bit surprising, but the gaming + magic angles are intriguing to him, and that seems natural enough.
Author's Response: Rune is just cranky and nasty.
Date: 02/11/19 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 2 Contentment
Hii Casey hope you are doing well and this is very interesting start to another story and has me hooked from the beginning. Waiting to read more and thank you for sharing
Author's Response: I hope it meets your expectations.