Date: 08/20/19 03:39 pm Title: Ch. 14: An Old Friend
Wow, poor Mikayla.
I'm glad I don't live in a world where pretty girls live under a threat like this. That would be awful. At any minute, someone might desire or envy them and - poof - they are executed and their body stolen.
It's a good horror story, though.
Author's Response: Yeah, Iíll admit this situation sucks for the original Mikayla, but itís great for Paul to get the life he wanted. Iím interested to hear your thoughts on some of my other stories, please let me know what you think! Thanks for reviewing. -Baq
Date: 03/08/19 02:25 am Title: Ch. 11: Experimenting
Wow! Mixed feelings, but can't fault the story. Very short chapters, but that really works here, you're doing a good job of being clear and pithy -- and now erotic. Waiting to learn if this is some kind of fantasy / alternate timeline, or did Mikayla's mind really get vanished? Is that fair, and should a clothing thief be rewarded this way? (But hey, it's fantasy...) Who is the mysterious friend? Stuff like that.
Date: 01/30/19 02:58 pm Title: Ch. 1: Magic Isn't Real
Ah, yes, the whole "I'm not transgender, I just daydream about being a girl constantly and, if given the opportunity to magically turn into one, would take it in a heartbeat" routine.
Reminds me of me in college :-P
Date: 01/30/19 04:36 am Title: Ch. 1: Magic Isn't Real
Good start, can't wait for more! I really like your story ideas.
But, seems a little rushed. What does Mike look like, since the word 'swap' is in the categories? Did Mikayla ever come back for her clothes? What does she look like? All we know is that she is perfect, her bra size (awesome), and a bit of her style preferences. Does she notice her bra missing before the Magic takes place?
A bit of a contradiction - Mike says he loves being a guy, then wishes he were Mikayla. Well, so many wishes are not thought out, that's what makes the situations so much fun!
Keep it up.