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Reviewer: DaniellaD Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 10/11/19 03:03 am Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Well well, that was a nice hot short story! Loved it!

Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 01/19/19 08:22 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Fun little romp with potential for more. Thanks

Reviewer: AlexiaRose Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/30/18 01:19 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

The scene where she dresses in the yoga pants got me kinda emotional. I have begun wearing yoga pants as I am trying to feel more like I should. I so wish this potion were real. Thank you for writing this nice fantasy.

Reviewer: Day Dreamer Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/26/18 10:35 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Nice, short, fun, mostly well written but a few typos. Thanks for posting it.

Reviewer: ForeverEgg Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/26/18 08:20 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

It's a fun little read. I felt attacked right off the bat with all the similarities I have with the main character and that carried pretty well through. It's a little alarming that she's starting off having casual unprotected sex... But I guess it's nice that Diana is accepting and accommodating.

Author's Response: Glad to hear he felt similar, I wanted to make him the sort of everyman that a lot of people could relate to. I tried to make it seem like the combination of hormonal changes and alcohol that made a somewhat perfect storm, but it was also a fairly short story, so I tried to compress it well. Appreciate the advice!

Reviewer: storylovinggamer Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/25/18 05:14 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Naughty dani

Reviewer: JosieTrent Signed Report
Date: 12/25/18 07:02 am Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

A few grammar mistakes, but otherwise this is a great start. Looking forward to new stories.

Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/24/18 09:47 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Liked it. Can you tell me what was in that vial?

Author's Response: tís supposed to be like a Polyjuice potion, but permanent. Itís made with normal, accessible ingredients, but the intent of the creator matters. In this case, Dianaís intention was to turn Rachel into a version of herself but prettier. Instead, it turned Daniel into a femal version of himself, but prettier than he would have normally been.

Reviewer: AimeeD Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 12/24/18 05:15 pm Title: A Secret Santa Surprise

Very cute story thank you for sharing it.

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