Reviews For On the Bench
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Reviewer: Amanda Lynn Signed Report
Date: 04/14/19 05:12 am Title: Not a Team Player

I like the story, I can see what the others mean, but I also see what you did. You just basically cut from Male to female suddenly. Felt like a Twilight Zone episode.

Reviewer: Lost Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/30/18 10:59 pm Title: Not a Team Player

This is a great story, but like others have said, it feels like it's missing a scene or two. He go from male to some slight feminine characteristics to female, basically.

Reviewer: 930310 Signed Report
Date: 11/29/18 01:01 pm Title: Not a Team Player

Well, there's Holly Dunn's "YOLO" and also Joe's "Golden Palace" woven in here but there are more works that I can see references too.

Author's Response: Well, okay, to expand on and clarify my original response: I didn't base this on any other story, nor did I have any other story in mind when I wrote it; I don't see the "Golden Palace" parallels, but I haven't read "YOLO," so if it really is that similar: my bad. I do try to be as original as possible, but I'm not always up to date on what's been done already, and I'd never knowingly copy someone without giving proper credit. I'll give "YOLO" a read, and if it is pretty similar I'll make an author's note or something. Hopefully that clears up any confusion, and I do appreciate that you cared enough to even bring it up.

Reviewer: RachelX Signed Report
Date: 11/29/18 08:10 am Title: Not a Team Player

I really like the concept, but... it seemed like a beginning and an end with no middle. Would love to read the "lost" middle part.
930310, what are the two stories you made reference to?
p.s. Is the title "On the bench" or "Not a Team Player"?

Author's Response: The title is "On the bench," but since the format of the website makes you enter a chapter title regardless of it being a oneshot, sometimes authors will add a chapter title as a minor subtitle. As for the lack of a "middle" section; if there *was* a story that helped to inspire this, it would be "The Yoga Studio" by Reticulus, which has a similar structure and payoff but a drastically different setup. Reading that might help you figure out what I was going for here, and why the idea of there needing to be more to the story kind of confuses me.

Reviewer: 930310 Signed Report
Date: 11/27/18 05:36 pm Title: Not a Team Player

I can see at least two stories that have huge similarities with the plot and setting of this story. Be sure to pay homage if your work was inspired by the works of others.

Author's Response: No, just a coincidence. It is a pretty basic setup; I'd probably be more surprised if it didn't come off as at least little generic.

Reviewer: jaimehlers Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 11/25/18 10:10 pm Title: Not a Team Player

Quite an interesting read. It did seem to move a little too fast, though. I think adding a couple of intermediate scenes (specifically, one where his dad didn't show up but his mom did, and another between being the "token male cheerleader" and 'rejoining' the cheer squad) would have helped flesh this out better. But it's a solid story nonetheless.

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