Date: 02/05/20 03:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
Fascinating story, I'm enjoying it very much. Hopefully you will be able to return and finish it one day.
Author's Response: Actually, I started retelling it - with some changes - as a webcomic! I love this story, and I will never let it go. But I can't seem to tell it as a story in a way that makes me happy, so. Webcomic.
Date: 01/24/19 11:59 pm Title: Chapter 5
I noticed a couple mistakes that could be caught with one more editing pass! A double the in chapter 4, and in chapter 5, a mix up between Lonna and Melissa's names, a missing word, and... A third thing. Forgot what.
With that out of the way, this is definitely one of the stories I'm tracking I'm the most happy with. Melissa is adorable, and I can't help but wonder if there's a way to piece together which world she's been pulled in... If she even has been pulled into a fictional world that exists IRL, it could be fiction within fiction.
As for Talith's appearant jealousy... I have a couple ideas what that could be, but I want to wait for more clues first. Point is, I'm very, very engaged in your story.
Author's Response: Ah, thanks for catching those! I intend to eventually do a remastered edition, where I hopefully catch all the mistakes (and add in some elements I feel were missing) - but first, I want to finish the story.... still... i'd like it if there were less issues in the first draft. DX DX DX DX I don't want to spoil anything for the series, so I'll let you continue imagining~ I will say that Talith's apparent jealousy DOES eventually get addressed, though.
Date: 01/24/19 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 4
Melissa and trope needs money, needs to train Melissa and needs to hide at the same time. The best way I think is for Melissa to appear to be just another working peasant girl while Lonna and Talith earned some money too. To go on that quest for the sword and armor will take money for supplies. Maybe Melissa can pick up some skills
Author's Response: That would be one way of going about it~! Not telling if it's the way I'm going.
Date: 01/18/19 03:11 am Title: Chapter 2
Hi Princess Kay! I love this story so far! I hope Melissa finds her talent, and is able to help the land recover from the evil queen. You seem like you're building lonna to be evil queen version 2 - or is that because everyone hates magic users due to the queen? I hope to see more of your writing soon!
Author's Response: The hate people feel for magic users IS pretty strong, though, and it's certainly effecting Lonna... But whether she becomes like the evil queen, or rejects the evil queen entirely, that's something you'll have to find out for yourself as the story progresses~
Date: 11/04/18 06:16 pm Title: Prologue
This looks pretty cool! Will we be seeing more of it soon?
Author's Response: Hopefully! I have a few series that need working on - I need to get back to The Roommate - but. This is a very important story to me, and it IS national novel writing month......