Date: 03/31/19 02:37 am Title: Chapter 4: The Consummation
Overall good story. Context of writing is great though a little more proofreading for spelling and grammatical errors wouldn't go amiss. However the mistakes certainly didn't take away from the story line itself.
Im very impressed with the originality of the story. A fresh new take on reluctant gender bending. I liked the build up as well. However I was hoping for a little more time to be spent on the "consummation" itself though this is purely a personal preference and not in any way a critique on how it was described. I just really like detail for a first time experience especially when the first time is the actual "first time" for the character.
With all that said I truly enjoyed the story to this point and I hope that it's something you plan to continue as I would very much like to see how things unfold.
Date: 11/07/18 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 2: The Big Day
well, now im sad because i read the chapter too fast and now i can't read any more X3
Great work though, the story and the plot and everything looks so interesting i can't stop reading. Also as a side note, those injections and liquids and such, totally should make them and more in real life