Date: 02/23/19 02:36 am Title: Becoming: A Crescent Fae (Short Story)
This story is actually pretty good, be a shame not to continue it. We already seen a small peek of the world, you could expand upon it by introducing other characters or some of the darker race's as yune put it. Cant forgot the magic element in the story, thanks to magic you can pretty much write whatever but gotta remember to have so basic laws of magic. An example would be the system in full metal alchemists with the equivalent exchange, or the chant based system where the longer and more vivid the chant is the more powerful it is.
Sorry for getting a little bit off track, back to the subject at hand there is potential in this story, one which could be expanded upon should you so choose to deem it worthy for your attention.
Date: 10/13/18 06:29 pm Title: Becoming: A Crescent Fae (Short Story)
Also, and this may just be me, but I've never heard of the fae to be anything other than mischievous/malicious. I'm very curious as to why Benjamin came out so overly gifted and why she seems like just a very small human.
Date: 10/13/18 10:55 am Title: Becoming: A Crescent Fae (Short Story)
More please! I loved this story, but it feels like it stopped at the beginning. There is so much for this new girl to explore in this new world. What is her role? How does she get wings and glowy birthmarks? What are the "less friendly" creatures of this realm like? To a more comic or smexy degree, why are her breasts so large?
To many questions. No answers.
I think you have that makings of an epic adventure with this story. Please continue.