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Reviewer: MrSimple Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 08/18/18 03:03 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow. o_o

Okay, this is not my cup of tea, but I enjoyed it. Actually found some of it humorous. XD

... Okay, sorry about that. Yeah, I felt for Tyrel, but I kinda think he had it coming. He wanted a different life, it just turned out not the way he expected it.

So, one star for the whole story existing. I'll throw in a little two because it kept my interest. I was really invested in how much worse he would alter his situation after he retrieved the artifact. That brings in a third for immersing me in, but as a bystander. I felt more comfortable being one of the alien costumers -- imagining what was going on behind the scenes -- rather than the two leads. XD

Fourth star for making me smile at the newly made couple. It was grotesquely sweet. ;)

The fifth went in because of this commission being well worth its weight for you to drag through to the finish. The detailed anatomy of the two Basilisks, setting, Tyrel's lack of assertion, and the mysterious, yet believable, fate of interacting with something out of this world. XD

Author's Response: Yeah it's certainly not a topic for everyone. Was an interesting stretch for me though. And yeah, I wrote Tyrel a little bit sullen and brattish. Glad it got you even though it's not quite your thing

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