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Reviewer: Vostok Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/18/18 05:32 am Title: Chapter 1: Four Mornings with Three Waifus

I agree with Elron. It's a good premise (one I've actually only seen once outside of this fic), but there are too many characters to keep track of when you jump around like that.

If anything, just editing the parts involving each character together would go a long way towards helping us keep track of what's going on, as opposed to jumping around between perspectives every fourth paragraph.

Author's Response: Yeah I think I could have handled that better. The commission required a broad survey of each "girl" but I also didn't want to retread a bunch of ground with the exact same "Wake up, find out your a chick, freak out" scene 1 to 1 each time. It was a hard thing to juggle and I'll need to think about how to do a better job of it in the future. That said, future episodes will probably be a lot more "together" than this one. Maybe even with whole chapters from the PoV of a single character. We'll have to see.

Reviewer: Do-S Signed Report
Date: 07/17/18 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 1: Four Mornings with Three Waifus

Good good, I hope to see more

Reviewer: Elron Signed starstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/17/18 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 1: Four Mornings with Three Waifus

I think this is a good idea for a story, but it's a little hard to follow all of the characters and their transformations. Have to reread a little slower to keep track of everything. Thanks for writing.

Author's Response: Yeah I think I could have handled that better. The commission required a broad survey of each "girl" but I also didn't want to retread a bunch of ground with the exact same "Wake up, find out your a chick, freak out" scene 1 to 1 each time. It was a hard thing to juggle and I'll need to think about how to do a better job of it in the future. That said, future episodes will probably be a lot more "together" than this one. Maybe even with whole chapters from the PoV of a single character. We'll have to see.

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