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Reviewer: BigBase Signed Report
Date: 07/19/18 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 1

Omg you're back! One of my favorite authors since the club, I absolutely love how you pace the tfs through the story. You found another great framing device here to experiment with your writing style. Really hopeful we will see more content sooner rather then later!! There's plenty of potential

Author's Response: Thank you! I had to change some things up to get back into it so now I have a Patreon and other plans. I'm really glad you liked the story and I hope the ending didn't feel out of place!

Reviewer: jonbarley7 Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/19/18 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 1

This story is fucking adorable and I love it

Author's Response: "Adorable" is an interesting way to put it considering the main character at the beginning and the stuff that happens. I'll assume you mean the very end, though :)

Reviewer: ubougie Signed Report
Date: 07/14/18 12:39 am Title: Chapter 1

Thanks! I am right there with you though. Siding with the reader is the way to go. I personally am not interested in going off on a million tangents just because I have a story to tell (though I have been guilty of that with at least one story, and I like to think I've learned my lesson). Instead I want to write stories that I also want to read. Often times, you're right (at least I think you'd agree with this): if you can, in the same amount of words, write three stories instead of one but where the plot is more in the background than "the point", then in the aggregate you have probably written a larger amount of sexy paragraphs. If someone reads a whole story but keeps coming back to one glorious paragraph, I want to learn more from that paragraph, and make as big a portion of my writing as possible be sexy like that. But except for in a specific writing style that jumps right into the action (Talking Dirty by Sir Lance Thrustalot and My Ultimate Change Fantasy by Miss Terri, both on fictionmania) a certain amount of story building can create context that leads to more effective sexy paragraphs. Good luck to both of us!

Reviewer: ubougie Signed Report
Date: 07/13/18 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 1

I tend to focus more on the middle of the story. Which you did very well. I tend to lose interest after the character snaps and just accepts it wholeheartedly. But you have to finish the story at some point, so it makes sense for the story to end in such a conclusive way. I still can't describe universally what I like in a tg story, but the best I can say is, incremental steps that each seem believable (which you had going in your story for a long time which is what made it good). In my own (unpublished) writing I have been exploring a lot how orientation can be manipulated incrementally, so that a reader who suspends disbelief can be made to believe it doesn't take much to "convince" someone, through a series of story telling devices, they actually like the other sex. It is a challenge to not trip on something that ruins the believability, but nonetheless a fun challenge to tackle.

Author's Response: That's the trick of it for me, I think: finding the balance between making the change in desires and orientation realistic without slowing the story down needlessly and turning off the reader. I err waaaay on the side of the reader and kinda help along the character (or force the desire in some cases) but I think it'd be possible in a longer format. A fun challenge but I don't know if it's one I can personally tackle any time soon since it'd be a time sink. Challenging and fun, though. I like trying to get into my character's heads and finding the path to flipping them realistically would be fun. I hope you decide to post your own stuff some time! Definitely good luck with it!

Reviewer: ubougie Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/13/18 01:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

Another great story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've been worrying a little that the very ending maybe was a little too different so I'm glad it doesn't seem to break the story.

Reviewer: Lilchelly Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 07/13/18 03:17 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow, that was interesting... I wonder who Dr Swally was and where she got those magick pills. Anyway hope Hannah finds peace in her new life. Also wish that doctor would help trans people too. That'd be nice.

Author's Response: Thank you for the comment and rating! I always appreciate hearing from readers. I think Hannah will be fine in her new life :)

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