Date: 10/24/18 06:42 am Title: A reunion of sorts
Apocalypse contingency? Oh my that sounds BAD. Is there really a system in place to work together with the villains in case of ultimate doom? That's amazing, this is so much like a comic book I wish I could fast forward a few years when everything's done so I could read it entirely and enjoy it with some hot cocoa
Date: 06/20/18 07:52 pm Title: Genetics
Wait what, did you mean it to just cut off there? Every other what?! WHAT?!
Author's Response: There was an old version of that conversation where all of the workings of Jack's psychic powers was explained but it just sucked, so I thought I'd just imply an explanation and show the workings of her power as well as a brief explanation here and there.
Date: 06/17/18 05:07 pm Title: A test of faith
Grandma knows, but she's letting it play out. OMG, this just gets more and more interesting. And again we are teased with the 'event' in Jack's brain that we still haven't seen yet. It's only chapter 6 though so I suspect maybe another ten chapters before the reveal depending on how long this story is. Also the secrets that the super heroes have, there is plenty i'm sure. Also OMG grandma's power is frightening. I cant wait to see more!
Date: 06/16/18 08:36 pm Title: First impressions
I'm confused... our character is quite unlikeable but somehow seems the smartest of the bunch. Why are the heroes acting so powerless? something is going on that isn't being said. Also what was the "thing" that happened? I'm curious... Oh don't answer me by the way I'm just musing to myself. Sorry no I don't want to know till you write it xD
Date: 06/14/18 08:59 pm Title: A chance encounter
This story can definitely go places. Choosing a character who does not want to be a hero is extremely creative and that will definitely keep things interesting. I also sense a bit of chemistry (but that could just be me ;). ) I like how i does not know everything about the MC's life it makes me want to find out so badly.
The only thing is I'm struggling to relate to the character. Like, I don't know why he should be so anti about being a hero. I don't need to know straight away, I would just like to know where his perspective is coming from maybe a bit of flashbacks.
Otherwise it feels like it could be a good story. I wish you luck
Date: 06/13/18 12:56 pm Title: Neither seen nor heard
Hey Beefed - I think this story has potential. I don't dislike the MC so far - he just seems to be a civilian who has powers, not a hero - I mean just because you can fly doesn't mean you have to fight crime - she could deliver pizzas "5 seconds or its free" or work for fed ex same day delivery. "Blitzkrieg Courier" could be her company. I think this is a really interesting story - especially if she gets drawn into heroics even while trying to avoid them.
Author's Response: I didn't think the MC was unlikeable, I just don't like them personally since they consistently make what I would deem to be the wrong decision, but that is, of course, entirely my fault. Always appreciate the feedback!
Date: 06/13/18 05:56 am Title: Neither seen nor heard
Fucking sweet. I'm liking where this is going. I like that he/she isn't all gun hoe about joining shit. And just wants to. Continue life or something. I'm liking the detail. I'm liking it all so far. And love that she told her sis to shut the fuck up
Author's Response: Glad I could capture your attention!