Date: 03/12/20 09:22 am Title: Part 1 - Reality Blind Boyfriend
I really don't know how to feel about this one. On one hand the smut and transformation elements are written excellently, with the transformation elements being some of the most well written I've personally seen.
However the actual plot is what bothers me. Due to the occasional shifting of the povs, the unreliableness of narrators under the influence of the device, and very broad range of traits the device can alter the story is very difficult to understand at times. Making the affected unaware of any change can surprisingly cause alot of confusion, especially as the swaps get more and more complex. While it certainly makes the action more tantalizing it gets confusing when mental changes are involved.
Speaking of, although Evan has chosen to live as a woman by the end I can't help but wonder if the device had any effect over that decision. At parts of the story those affected by the swaps come up with explanations for their current state of being/mind, even changing the past of the characters to abide the changes. Even though Evan eventually sees through the swaps, he and Ellen were the most modified of the characters in the story both mentally and physically. Ultimately they're not the same people they were before the device was brought into their lives so Evan revealing himself to always wanting to be a woman doesn't sit well with me as it feels like the device altered him into wanting that. Even with the characters being content with how they are now it I would've preferred a cleaner reset with Ellen having still learned her lesson.
Confusing writing and problematic character development aside, I greatly enjoyed all the transformations in this story! I look forward to whatever you write next!
Date: 12/12/19 04:26 pm Title: Part 21 – Breast Laid Plans
For the longest time, I haven't really known what to make of this story.
I love transformational stories. I love bimbo stories, and we certainly got there even if it took a bit. The turns of betrayal have been great.
Sometimes it got a bit chaotic, and I couldn't really follow who'd been swapped with what, but looking back now I think that was deliberate. Figuring out who thinks what is normal for a gender or role makes my head hurt more than Slut with a hangover.
So I absolutely loved the way this episode tied things together. I love how both Ellen and Slut were willing to sacrifice for each other's happiness, and for Evan's. I'm just worried because of all the foreshadowing, the passages written like Ellen is looking back after everything turned out terrible.
Don't let it turn out terrible! You still have the power to write a happy ending! Please
Date: 11/12/19 06:59 pm Title: Part 18 - Hair Today, Boobs Tomorrow
Will Elizabeth ever see the light? I dislike her, but keep hoping for redemption. Maybe she can fix Ellen and together they can make Evan the girl he's always wanted to be. Keep up the great work!!
Date: 11/05/19 01:59 am Title: Part 17 - A New Weirdness!
First of all, I love this story. The changes are random and extremely entertaining. That being said, I absolutely hate Elizabeth. Hate. Evan is so nice and Elizabeth is the worst. I almost never make suggestions to a fellow author, but please do not allow Elizabeth to come out of this on top.
Otherwise, GREAT story!
Date: 05/30/19 11:47 pm Title: Part 10 - The Breast of all Worlds
I've read all the way up to chapter 17 on DA. So i was wondering how much worse is everything going to get before everything gets put back into a state that's at least close to what it originally was? Unless it's going to be a "The Bad Guy Wins" scenario which would be newish but boring to say the least.
Date: 09/21/18 07:03 pm Title: Part 3 - Swap till you Drop
Like the story, though the idiotic MC kinda makes me cringe despite being funny - the MC seems to be a bit ridiculous in her swaps, taking petty revenge without fixing her own issues(which would still get petty revenge).
Date: 07/06/18 06:29 pm Title: Part 3 - Swap till you Drop
Wild and crazy -- but in some ways not crazy enough! Hard to follow at points, naturally, given all the reality-shifting going on. Sometimes I think, "that's all? If it were ME, I'd swap THIS next..." Although with some ethical qualms, because if you can only swap, and not create or copy, is that fair to your victims, even though they're amnesiac? Also, why aren't the main characters worried about eventually swapping back to themselves? You might elaborate on that.
Anyway, please do keep exploring all the gender mix-ups and playful (hopefully harmless) fun what-ifs. And remember to enlighten us if the device getting hot, means anything. Thanks.