Date: 04/27/19 12:45 am Title: Chapter 4
I am honestly starting to despise your main character. She acts like a couple of my daughter's former friends whom I have had to permanently ban. Since Colin is now in her body, why is he playing along with it? What is his motivation for continuing her insanity?
Date: 07/28/18 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 2
I like the mystery around the swap. I'm a bit confused, is Tori in Colin's body and she's just pretending to be him? Like Colin has been pretending to be Toria? Or did he just take over Tori's body and there are now 2 Colin's? One in Colin's body and one in Troi's? The mystery voice at the end of this chapter is interesting.
Date: 06/13/18 11:20 am Title: Chapter 5
Interesting. If the voice in his head is Tori, then who's in his body? Of course, it's entirely possible it's just a bit of Tori's psyche. Or our hero here is really just Tori having gone insane. Will be glad to see where it goes.
The dream wasn't something I was expecting but character development is always welcome. Might go some ways to explain why Tori is such an attention whore.
The masturbation was pretty well done though personally I find the transformation more stimulating as it were.
Personally, every 5 days seems like a great schedule for me for work of this length and quality. I wish I had that ethic. Keep it up.
Date: 06/03/18 08:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great stuff. A true bimbo TG in the old style, yet the characters feel quite real. You're improving visibly as you write as well. The balance of personality change vs. the struggle to keep the old identity is always extremely difficult to get right but so far you're managing perfectly. I eagerly look forward to more.
Poor Colin, stuck with Tori's vapid subconscious. Somehow I get the feeling he'll have interesting dreams.
Date: 05/29/18 09:29 am Title: Chapter 1
your story is improving from chapter to chapter I like that she feels the need to prove she isn't just insane instead of just trusting she is who she thinks she is. Though tori feels really slutty for her age, I wonder if she is abused that could lead to her lashing out like that but thats just my own crazy theory