Date: 02/09/19 02:38 am Title: Chapter 1
I was prompted to write a review of this after reading a post you wrote regarding 'disappointing gems.' As another writer, I wanted to take some time and read this story and give you some deserved respect and honest thoughts.
First the good. The characters are well thought out. You clearly dive into the subject matter and wield it with an expertise that only true writers can. It is very well written and easy to follow.
The premise itself is also a very interesting one. 'What if' someone's transition came as a result of a con job? That is a very intriguing hook.
That's where this story specifically begins to fall a little flat for me. I get that there is a 'gotcha!' right at the end, but for the most part this story is exactly as it seems from first blush. No twists, no turns, no real suprises.
And I don't mean this to be discouraging in any manner. What you wrote is good. But I feel like you let the story - the reason why the story was happening - be average and this was just a tad disappointing from the standpoint that I know you could have done more with it.
Author's Response: Thanks. And you've pointed out my main weakness. When I get an idea, I work and work on the characters and the set up. Then somewhere along the line, my thinking just seems to get kind of flat. I wonder if it's because when I get about half way through a story, I get the idea for the next one. Maybe I try to hurry and finish it so I can get to work on the next.
Date: 07/12/18 11:33 am Title: Chapter 12 Who Would Have Thought It
Oh wowey what a awesome surprise in the end. Eagerly waiting for your next awesome story. You are a superstar Casey. Hugs
Author's Response: Thank you Sanro. It will be a while. I worked on one for weeks before deciding it just wasn't going to make it. A new one is in the works.
Date: 07/08/18 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 12 Who Would Have Thought It
Love the twist on the end! You surprised me big time! Excellent work, looking forward to ur next story . Thank you for the twist
Author's Response: Thanks. It will be a while before my next story. I spent weeks working on one that ended up fizzling out, and have just begun another that I think will be OK. At least a couple of weeks before I'm ready to begin posting it.
Date: 06/05/18 02:21 pm Title: Chapter 2 The Approach
This is incredible start to a incredible story. Casey I adore you and love reading your stories. You are a star. Hope you are doing well
Author's Response: Blushing here at your praise. I'm so glad you enjoy this one as well as some of the rest.
Date: 06/01/18 10:34 am Title: Chapter 1
It’s really hard to like either the narrator or Tina, but it’s just as difficult not to admire their meticulous deviousness. You’re really good at this, Casey, and this is developing very nicely indeed.
Author's Response: Thank you. Yes, devious they are.
Date: 05/18/18 10:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Hooray! I enjoyed Accidental Girl, but it’s great to have the twisted imagination of Ms Thompson back in full malevolent flow. Great start, Casey.
Author's Response: Laughing. Thank you. I hope my malevolence lives up to your expectations.