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Reviewer: Lailaluvs00 Signed Report
Date: 05/05/18 05:02 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ive had a fantasy like this for years. I appreciate what you are doing, but slow down and add some details to make it more interesting and build the suspense and sexuality. How does each of them feel abiut whats happenning? how does it feel to put on the girl clothes? How does he feel about modelling them? Maybe he feels more than one thing, excited , scared, angry, confused? Has he ever done this or thiught about this before?
And what about the environment, are there colors and smells that are new and different in his cousins rooms? Does their room or wardrobe say anything about them that yiu can use later to introduce them as characters? Finally What about his friend, has he always wanted this or does it happen suddenly, does he want a girl or a ladyboy, does he want her to be a slut or a shy submissive? Take your time and really pretend to get inside the head of each character and be them, see where it leads you. Dont be afraid to write too much, it's always easier to cut it back later after you read it again (very important to put it down for a day then read again with fresh eyes like you are seeing it for the first time before publishing)
Good luck and have fun!

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