Date: 10/25/18 02:49 pm Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Ok. Just a bit insight. The main character is 6'2" and 190 lbs or so. He is called chubby. For 6'2" I don't think that is at all chubby, especially if he has some muscles. I think he would be in the normal range. If he worked out his drop would be close to 17" when he buys a suit and would need a specially tailored suit to fit well.
Author's Response: Thank you for sharing your point of view! :D I'm not good with imperial system, but I calculated his BMI, and he's very close to be "overweight", so I guess that "chubby" fits him! But I'm from Europe, maybe we have a different perception of weight, I hope you liked the story! :D
Date: 04/19/18 10:10 am Title: Chapter 2: Do You Have A Better Idea?
Looks good. By the way, the past tense of 'choose' isn't 'choosed' but 'chose', and the plural of 'foot' is 'feet' instead of 'foots'. Otherwise seems to be quite clean of obvious mistakes, good job!
Author's Response: Thanks for your corrections, I applied them! :D