Date: 03/02/18 08:15 am Title: Chapter 1
That was a sweet, clever story. I didn't notice any serious problems with it; use of digits instead of written-out number words for small numbers like eight, for instance, and improper dashes (you used single dash with a space after but not before instead of an em dash or double dash, with consistent spacing). But the story itself? Very good. Thank you.
Author's Response: Yeah, I didn't really edit it as thoroughly as I should've- but I'm glad you liked it!