Date: 03/05/18 11:24 am Title: The Legion
Ah, people with conflicting views (and possible paranoia) against those with powers. That's a classic confli-- and wait. Is it over already? Are you only doing short pieces of an anthology that may or may not be connected at all? Interesting. Risky enough when stories are so short that events aren't allowed the breathe or have their impact, but this could be an interesting start to something awesome.
Date: 03/05/18 11:18 am Title: Category-testing
Everything's happening at quite the brisk pace. Changes, acceptance by numerous support characters, and all around lots of happiness. That's good; happiness is a good thing. However, I'm not sensing much conflict, if any, which stories generally need within their plot. It doesn't need to be "save the world" or anything cataclysmic, but a call to action and challenge of the MC's very character that causes her to grow as a person would not go amiss. Still, I'm glad you're writing this as you want.