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Reviewer: Johanna Bender Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/28/18 01:03 pm Title: Don't Talk to Strangers

I would agree with Wishful Thinking above. A great story with an ending that leaves you wanting more. Seems like you ran out of steam by the ending. It was hard to identify with her hatred of Dom, who seemed like a decent guy who was sexually attracted to Jessica. Why would she believe he was terrible- particularly considering the great orgasms she experienced while having sex with him? If his actions were terrible, why didn't you spend more time detailing his humiliation. Perhaps escaping with her now changed into a male and adjusting to life as a woman. However, overall the story was well-written and very steamy. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice!

Reviewer: WishfulThinking Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/27/18 02:07 am Title: Sweet Goodbyes

Well... quite an intense story. Surreal how everyone changed seemed to suffer a lot. I don't feel like the story came full circle though - it would have been good to see Jessica get right up to the point of sending the message, and maybe even go as far as to switch to present tense and keep going for a bit. Give the reader some closure, you know? It's well written though and I didn't find plot holes or anything, just the odd miswritten word every now and then, enough to be distracting though.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'll correct the typos next time I read through it.

Reviewer: sourmashwhiskey Signed starstarstarstarstar Report
Date: 02/24/18 01:53 am Title: Sweet Goodbyes

Pretty good!

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