Date: 05/26/18 05:34 pm Title: Do-over
Hey, it's been 2 months since the last update. I'm checking back ever-so-often but don't find anything new. What's up? When's the next chapter coming to dazzle my mind once again?
Author's Response: I have been sitting exams for almost two months and preparing for said exams for another month. As much as I enjoy writing, especially this story, I had to focus on real life for a little, but that shouldn't be a problem for a while! Yay summer!
Date: 05/04/18 06:40 pm Title: Do-over
Ok, read Ch-7.
1. This chapter is too much rushed. Even if the MC had to live the day multiple times, you could've explained it a little better.
2. Ian lives in Human only zone so there needs to be an explanation for him developing powers.
Author's Response: 1. I know, I'll fix it....once I've forgotten and remembered about three or four more times 2. The Hazards work like the mutants from X men or wizards in Harry Potter, normal parents can have special kids. Appreciate the reviews.
Date: 02/23/18 06:43 pm Title: Super power
Whoa... great to see my idea taken up but can't take all the credit, since you might've thought of it earlier. And Pete's GF, good one. Also, you're doing great progress with improving your spelling & grammar. Keep it up!
P.s. Saw H. Williams coming ;-)
Date: 02/19/18 12:39 am Title: Super power
Tracking well... I'm still finding grammar and phrasing issues. You seem to have been consumed by the coolness of super powers and forgotten about the weirdness of gender change. I'm enjoying it plenty but at least a scene with Blake reflecting on the changes, or someone in her life talking about it with her would be good.
Author's Response: I'm sorry about any mistakes, I do my best but English isn't my main language so there are things I just might not know, if there are any consistent errors please let me know. And yeah, I do tend to get distracted by the superpowers, but I think Blake is also focusing on that more as a form of denial. Rest assured that will come up (although my holiday is over now so it'll be a while). Appreciate the feedback!
Date: 02/16/18 03:50 am Title: Southern snow
I'm really enjoying this so far. I'm a sucker for super powers. I'm keen to see how you explore this world you've created. I spotted a couple spelling and grammar mistakes in the first chapter, I think, but it was all good after that.
Date: 02/15/18 06:55 pm Title: Cold spell
Now this is what I call a great start to a fabulous story... I'm in all the way. You can try to make the protagonist find a way to acquire and use all the powers to defeat a boss enemy, someone who formed a gang of 'bad hazards' (in lack of better terms).